Robin
warming white
melting frost
with bird-toes
Robin
braving blue
and cold
bird nose
beyond beak
there's a world of others
wherever
bird goes
Author notes
thank you for the prompt, I hope you like it and best wishes for your 1st contest,
Isabella
A contest entry
- Winter Bird ( picture prompt ) by White Tiger 96.
350 points, ended December 4, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - AP FAMILY! by Shades of Pale.
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Hi Isabella,
I love the deceptive simplicity of this poem as presented in your first two verses and then comes your brillance in the last verse:
"beyond beak
there's a world of others..."
I believe these lines apply to us all. In other words, Isabella, I read the lines as our world being bigger beyond our noses!
Beautiful use of imagery and metaphor!!
Warm wishes,
Liveddog.
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COOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL!
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sooo um good but what do you wanna be?
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your friend(s) who goes crazy over cheese, please!
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Very Sweet poem!! I think you did an excellent job here. It shows talent. Thanks for the entry!! Keep Writing I look forward to reading more from you!!
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