gumbo is a delicacy in new awlins
scrumptious treat shared by two
that is until she noticed
traces of no-sexual-preference
running down his skinny leg
and a sick look of pleasure
plastered on his face
while checking out
a strange man
in the booth
across from them
he licked his fingers
smiled
winked, crossed his leg
and flung a twisted hand in the air
lurching toward him
from across the table
she whispered;
"you've got parsley
in your teeth"
Author notes
Contest prompt:
"So...give me the eye catching, fancy footwork titles...
Give me titles that rock my world hahhaaha keep them out of the gutter though, thank you...
I will weigh in on the 'best' ones."
A contest entry
- I Just Love Fantastic Titles by 2lullabyhaven.
650 points, ended December 20, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow, this kind of left me speechless, I don't quite know what to say, but I will say thank you for your entry and the many trails it took me
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I am lost, I do not know what to say. This is very strange but it was not to mystate. I isneither good or bad. Not my cup of tea.
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U GAVE IT THE RIGHT TAG,"WEIRD"...
NICE DESCRIPTION OF THE SKINNY MAN...
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lovely piece.
no-sexual-preference confused me. how did he show it? feels like you're telling, not showing. and i'm still not sure what it means Maybe no-sexual-interest?
i don't know what I think of clever endings overall, but this one works pretty ewll
Thanks for the fun poem -
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Well...he was with me (female) on a date, and enjoying the pleasure of staring at the "man" (male), as in "sexual preference". I thought it was subtle yet evident, but I do see what you mean by showing in that area and not telling.
Thanks for taking the time to read my poetry.
april nicole
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nice
like it -
mmmm
Those words were tasty and eccentric!
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WOW!
I am sure your hidden talent is writing scripts! In few lines - the real "scene of action"....GREAT!
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Interesting poem.
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Bravo...
I echo the thoughts of Swan, the Prophet and Poetryality!
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LOL I never expected the last lines! I love your reference to "new awlins". That's how my grandparents pronounced the words. LOL
This is truly clever and the title is one for the books. I have missed your musing dear friend. Looks like you pick back up without a hitch. The best to you in the contest.
"that is until she noticed
traces of no-sexual-preference
running down his skinny leg"
Oh do I ever love the visual from that stanza. LOL
The best to you in the contest dear sister. With this piece, I am sure you have m ore than a chance.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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very interesting piece
I LIKE IT!
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honestly, a very well written character/situational write ... the kind of piece i have always found comfortably insane, in my own scribblings ...
this is the first piece i have read from you and am impressed, will read more and hope you remain as true to honesty as you have in this piece ...
*cheers*
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