When the lady of love spews the salts of life
And time circles the bowels of earth
The second the hour is come and gone
I will be there with my hands opened
Palms up
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Really Good Write!
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Interesting!
First impression is of an incantation or spell - the reference to salt, circling the bowels, and waiting an hour seems like a set ritual.
Second read, I focused on the active party - the lady of love. Waiting for her bounty, through whatever process, seems more like the yearning of a lonely soul. That picture fits more with the last line of waiting to receive love "palms up".
Thoughtful and compelling picture.
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lovely.
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excellent
so much in so few words
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Superb
Ah, 'tis a fine write, indeed. You've expressed yourself quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
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Very well written for a poem that is as short as yours. It is clear concise and straight to the point without changing or deviating from your main point. It is a very good point of view as the commenter below me has written. Very good job, well done. -
Good point of view.You were clear and easy to follow and understand.Your wors had a good flow and you chose the perect title I think.Great job.
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