Grasping this mask with failing hands
As they stare at me unconsciously
Waiting for my true face to be shown
To watch as I slip up and tumble
Believing was my worst mistake
As slowly the lies became clear
Watching society gnaw at each other
Like vultures in a cage
I can never surrender myself to them
For they shall rip me limb from limb
Pulling me down in a humiliating bewilderment
Whilst tearing these wings from my back
I cannot let them win
For this mask shows elegance and beauty
Yet their teeth are bloody and they screech
As if they truly are wild animals
Chains shuddering as a new kill lies down
Whilst each person turns for their meal
Their elegance fading as their hands hold bones
From which the blood drips off in torrents
Put me to sleep so I cannot witness this
The cruel act of watching people being torn apart
Hurt me as you wish for your nails are long and deadly
Sharpened so you can drive them into my throat
Kill me if you will, I'll beg you if I must
I've survived long enough behind this cage
Watching people as they fall
Do not hate me for leaving
Or bearing these chains as my children
For the blood has taken a sweeter smell
And this time I am their prey, staking my ground amongst the gravel
Author notes
Alrighty. I generally find inspiration from music or pictures, this is from music. It isn't the beat of the music or a set of lyrics but generally one word such as hollow or something. I caught onto words such as faith, broken, survive, alone and angel. You can't really see the 'angel' in this piece but I interpreted it as someone different, thus the person who is wearing the mask. My view on society is still very up and down, this is one of my views about society. So I'm inspired by a couple of words, my own imagination and the world around me I guess.
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Comments
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This was one of my favorites. I really enjoyed reading this because I absolutely adored the imagery it was excellent.
I think you should try using more puncuation to make the flow better.
That was the only thing that left me unsure on this piece was I couldn't tackle how to read it.
The lines were always different lengths, there was no meter, it left my brain confused.
The piece itself though is fantastic, what you say, and how you say it is really good.
And this piece has amazing potential.
I hope you keep writing!!
Best of luck!
Kate
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i really..like this...you put your heart into this one..great write
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An angel in society, surrounded by ferocious animals...
Such a powerful message.
Or at least that's how I interpreted it.
Maybe I worded it wrong. Lol.
I definitely got the message you were sending, but I'm just weird so I have no idea what I'm saying...
Gahhh. Forget it.
I loved it.
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Thank you so much. I think it could have been what I was looking for. Not really sure lol
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