It's not about the way you look
It's about the way you move
The way you groove
How you feel
How you steal
Those precious moments
Eyes, hands, lips, tongue
Ready and taking measure
For action
And pleasure
A contest entry
- Seductive Max 50 words 20 poets not a PIF by Unconscious-Energy.
1200 points, ended December 11, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think?
Comments
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Yes, well done. Seductive but sweet. Some good lines: How you steal those precious moments . . . I liked your use of rhyme, which enhanced the effect. In less skillful hands it might have been a distraction.
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I like this. If I were you, I would make the last lines, "For action/And for pleasure". This is short and sweet though. Good job.
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To the point.. loved it well done...
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Ah..how poetically you have summed up the truth of the love and the fact of the life in it as well..just a great poetry is here...
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