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the First Yes

It was Halloween night nineteen seventy-four.
My hope stood behind a formidable door.
I was fourteen years old, not quite a man,
beginning to question my ridiculous plan.

With palms full of sweat, my bony knees shook.
My friends were all hiding as I turned back to look.
“You can do it!” one said, pointing to the bell.
I raised up my finger not feeling so well.

What was I thinking accepting this dare?
I wished I could be anywhere but right there.
My heart began pounding, my stomach in a knot.
I was chilling and shaking, despite being hot.

I couldn’t back down, I’d been far too bold.
Terrified at what the next moment might hold.
The door then swung open before I could hide.
Trick or treaters came out from somewhere inside.

Suddenly facing what I had most feared.
My body stood frozen it must have appeared.
My mouth felt as if it were stuffed full of cotton.
The reason I’m here? I must have forgotten.

Then the most beautiful sight I had seen,
sarcastically grinned and asked, “Halloween?”
“Uh…, no…,” I stammered, dropping my head,
looking at the top of my shoes now instead.

Hands in my pockets, I was squirming around,
having lost the ability to muster a sound.
She stepped on the porch and turned the light on.
“Would you like some candy before it’s all gone?”


“Okay…, I mean no, it makes me break out.”
Oh my gosh! What on earth am I talking about?
She asked, “Would you like to sit on the stools,
pass out some treats to the goblins and ghouls?”

I nodded as my fear became tempered and tamed.
“I think that I like you” I abruptly exclaimed.
For one shining moment my life was complete,
as she uttered the words that sounded so sweet.

“I think that you’re nice, and I like you too.”
Words that still echo my mind like brand-new.
We passed out some treats and sat for a while.
When I asked her out, she said, “Yes” with a smile.

When she closed the door and went back inside,
I couldn’t just sweep my emotions aside.
Turning I pumped my fists towards the sky.
My vertical jump must have been three feet high.

A couple of friends were still waiting for me.
“She said yes!” I shouted, “Were you able to see?”
I could have been walking around among kings.
A warm fuzzy feeling that memory still brings.

Not much ever came of that Halloween romance.
I remember one movie, maybe one dance.
For that first big crush from a scared little lad.
What a magical impact that first “Yes” had.

Author notes

This was inspired by an actual event... it had quite an impact for me.
Kevin Pace WordsDoMatter

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  • sweet innocence
    April 30

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    This was really good, i don't usually like rhyme however this was an exception, I truly enjoyed reading this poem. I loved the story and the poem flowed wonderfully. it is pretty good
    well penned


  • pinksnowboots
    February 17
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    aww this is so cute!


  • Raining Kisses silver member
    February 1
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    i love love love it thanks for the entry and the treat


  • CelticQueen
    January 21
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    What a delightful story! Thanks for entering my contest.

    celtic queen


  • Daisy Ballerina
    January 6
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    Awwww...
    I love it!!


  • film noir
    December 30, 2008

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    A very interesting poem.

    Thanks for your entry!
    Good Luck in the contest!

    - Aly, the co judge


    • WordsDoMatter
      December 30, 2008
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      thanks

      probably not as interesting as it was being there... with cotton in my mouth... thanks for the review -Kevin


  • RuLives4GodOnly
    December 11, 2008
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    Awww... sooo cuteeee!!!! lol!


    • WordsDoMatter
      December 12, 2008
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      awww.... thanks

      hey, thanks for reading, that one was fun. Kevin


  • Lexie
    December 4, 2008
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    wow, i love that story. it is so romantic, even though you said your relation with the girl did not evolve into much, i still loved it. great flow. great words and rhyming. i loved it. you are like on of my favorite poets on here. i wish i could write like you do. so creative. and the actual event, that is so awesome that this story was inspired by an actual event.


  • sensualbutterfly
    December 4, 2008

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    Oh wow. You relayed the story so well. I love the imagery, it is as if I was one of the friends hiding behind a bush watching it all! That was absolutely amazing. Thank you so much for your entry.


    • WordsDoMatter
      December 5, 2008
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      thanks

      for the review and the contest, this was a fun write bringing backk many memories - Kevin

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