IT ALL BEGAN WHEN SHE WAS BUT YET A TEEN,
IT WAS COOL AND MADE HER, SHE THOUGHT, LOOK LIKE A BEAUTY QUEEN,
THE HARMFUL EFFECTS AT THAT TIME WERE UNKNOWN,
TO THE CIGARETTE HER BODY SHE DID LOAN,
SHE MARRIED AND RAISED A FAMILY,
ALL THE TIME NOT KNOWING, HER LIFE, WOULD BE SNUFFED OUT, BY THE BIG "C",
AS SHE SMOKED, IT GOT EVERYWHERE,
IN HER LUNGS, HER CHILDREN AND IN HER HAIR,
SHE SAID OVER AND OVER, I COULD QUIT, IF I WANTED TO,
BUT ALL THE WORLD KNEW IT WAS NOT TRUE,
THEN ONE DAY THE PAYMENT WAS DUE,
THE BIG "C" WANTED HER BODY PARTS TOO,
THE BREAST WAS THE FIRST TO BE REMOVED,
THEN THE MOUTH, THE TONGUE AND THROAT PARTS TOO,
THANK GOD, SHE DIDN'T DIE THAT DAY,
BUT TEN YEARS LATER THE BIG "C" WOULD TAKE FULL PAY,
EVEN IN HER FINAL DAYS,
A CIGARETTE SHE NEEDED, WAS WHAT SHE'D SAY,
IT WASN'T EASY TO SMOKE IT THOUGH,
YOU SEE, WITH A HOLE IN HER THROAT SHE HAD TO PINCH HER NOSE,
THE HOLE WOULD NOT ALLOW HER TO PUFF,
BUT WHEN SHE PINCHED HER NOSE, SHE COULD SUCK,
MY MOTHER THE BIG "C" DID TAKE AWAY,
SO BE CAREFUL YOU SMOKERS BECAUSE YOU MAY HAVE TO SUCK ONE DAY!
Author notes
The Tie Guy # 6
A contest entry
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490 points, ended December 22, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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wow nice story line here, sorry if its true, but it made for an exquisite write. I'm not to keen on the use of capitals, but it does seem to work here. Best of luck in the contest. Keep on writing, ~TC
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very sorry to hear that. some of us know the consequences but we get sucked in, and cant get out. lovely poem
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I like it how, not once in the entire poem, you actually mention cancer, and its just the "Big C", it reminds me of something a young child would be told.
My favourite lines in this poem are;
"THE BIG "C" WANTED HER BODY PARTS TOO,
THE BREAST WAS THE FIRST TO BE REMOVED,
THEN THE MOUTH, THE TONGUE AND THROAT PARTS TOO,"
I dont know why, i just really like how that is worded, and how it flows.
Good luck in the contest,
Devon
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