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Think Carefully

                            I want you to be consumed by me
          in thought. pondering, pondering because im on your mind.
                              The same way you're on mine.
                      My image having u withdrawn, motionless
                    with deadpan silence leaving u breathless.
                  You, seeing me in your dreams, ur nightmares,
                              hoping to see me when u awake.
                              Couldn't care what's at stake.

                                      Im inescapable now.
                                        Your new home;

                                  Talk to me, when you're alone
                                        and among people.
                                              Pray for me,
                                            Not against me.
                              Hope for me, My success and
                          future u hope one day u will be part of.

                              You wonder about me, how?
                                                    Then,

                                      What am i doing now
                    that you know your always in my thoughts
                                  and im neva in yours?
                          Pretty straight forward- not a clause..
                                        Take this time to

                                                pause.



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  • Sandygram silver member
    December 5, 2008

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    A lovely poem. Nice imagery of wondering is another is thinking of us as we think of them. Missing someone dear to me, I can relate to your questions within your lovely poem. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy


  • Lady.Screamo
    December 3, 2008
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    Very Good

    I really like how u made it to where you were speaking to us.