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[ we are hello people ]

we are hello people
do make say think
eat pie watch tree
fill feel meatier

walk stalk smoking barrel
cock block two inch man
goodbye papa see the day
village light comes far away

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  • StupidxGirl
    December 4, 2008

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    This goes to show even nonsense can be interesting

    I am interested in your choice of words,
    where did they come from?

    Did ya' just pull them out of the air? lol


    • Methusala
      December 5, 2008
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      glad to know you're interested. it makes me happy that you continually comment on my work, even if i don't necessarily have the time to return the favor.

      i'm not exactly sure where the phrase "we are hello people" came from, but i woke up with it in my head and i thought i should write it down because i liked it, even though i didn't know what it meant.

      "do make say think" comes from the name of this great sound engineering band, they're fantastic instrumentalists. i guess they got they're name from somewhere, too. they used to practice in a kindergarten classroom, and those words were plastered on the walls as feel good verbs for the kids, i suppose.

      "eat pie, watch tree" = i'm not really sure where that came from, but i think has something to do, subconsciously, with thanksgiving.

      "fill feel meatier" comes from a thanksgiving presentation that happened in my American Lit. Someone was talking about foods served at the first thanksgiving and they said "can anyone think of anything meatier?" and i thought they meant "meteor" so i thought that was a pretty cool homonym.

      "walk stalk smoking barrell" = i guess that is a play on "lock, stock, and two smoking barrells." i was just writing nonsense from there to try to fit the pattern and make some good end/internal rhymes, and that's what i came up with for that line.

      the of course, cock block goes along with walk stalk thing (walk stalk too may come from a conversation i'd had earlier in the day) but also it's a funny phrase. "don't be a cock block" lol. the two inch man part of that comes from a kyuss song, "one inch man".

      not sure where "goodbye papa, see the day" comes from, but it probably has something to do with the latin phrase "carpe diem" which means seize the day, so there are similar sounding words there. i really like that line though.

      and finally, the last line, i have no idea where that came from, it's probably something subconcious once again lol.

      sorry for such a verbose explanation, but you asked! lol. thanks for the comment though, really.