her eyes
followed that which mine could not see
last breath expelled,
her face relaxed
and left a hint of a smile
the scent of roses filled the room
Author notes
inspiration:
"and I think of each life as a flower, as common
as a field daisy, and as singular"
- mary oliver, when death comes
A contest entry
- death is but a fine breath by adsaige.
700 points, ended December 25, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Simple and elegant
I love this, the magic weaved with your words is beautiful and exquisite.
Love RF
P.S thank you for your comment on 'bye-bye'' lol, you had me laughing! I should definatly add something like that!!
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had to come back and read.
this is a - once you read it you can never forget it - write .
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beautiful (:
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thanks
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Oh my, how this hit home. I have experienced this-smelling flowers right after a loved one died. This touched my heart.
Joe
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beautiful
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thanks
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beautiful, beautiful...
m
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thanks
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omg
this is fan-freakin-tastic!
you did well with the prompt...
♥Becky♥
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xoxox
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thanks
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