Through twisted turns,
you observed
my intricacies~
detailing
each curve of my face
and lip’s bow…
turning
every cry of confusion
to silence, in your arms…
forming
moments of your time
into opening mine with smiles,
designed for you.
And as I come to the end of my wire,
you trace your love so beautifully
upon my heart~
lifting past's cloud
to reveal its silver lining...
entwined with golden tomorrows.
Author notes
prompt: filigree
A contest entry
- Filigree by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended December 17, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wonderful
Very creative and well done. Congrats on the gold.
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Inspired!
I know you are probably getting tired of hearing the word beautiful from me, so I'll try a few synonyms...Stunning! Elegent! Striking! I love the way that you use the process of filigreeing to describe what this person's love feels like, how it makes you into a beautiful work or art. Just like this poem is a beautiful work of art. Definately deserves the Gold.
-Garrett
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can a girl ever hear the word beautiful too much? jk...
im just glad to have someone read it and see how i meant it to be read... thanks
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Such a joy to read a poem that leaves one breathless. Tenderly written to the prompt, yet such finality in meaning casts a shadow .
My favorite stanza:
turning
every cry of confusion
to silence, in your arms…
How utterly enchanting, fulfilling and warm. A place I would love to be right now.
This piece is pure poetry written beautifully and fully to this prompt with ease and gentle understanding. Amazing work and a superb entry to this contest. Thank you.
Excellent. ~Pamela
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A soft maze of entwined touch makes this one glow
with tender hope manifesting the curves of tomorrow. I like this very much!
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Loved this poem, it spirals delicately through a path of your heart.
Thank you for letting me walk there.
Best of luck in the contest
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A beautiful write that touched my heart with such passion and emotion a write which I enjoyed immensly...
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You really have a way with words. . .I was going to try to pick my favorite part, but so many pieces of the poem tie for it. . .including the title.
Oh to love and to be loved! I particularly like the delicateness of it all.
Ok so I do have a favorite part of the favorite parts: "turning
every cry of confusion
to silence, in your arms…" This part is so comforting.
well and I have to put this one too to be fair: "forming
moments of your time
into opening mine with smiles,
designed for you.
And this part is just "Wow" . . .
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thanks... the prompt was inspiring. you should write one
ya.. thats a good idea
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And as I come to the end of my wire,
you trace your love so beautifully
upon my heart~
Wow, This makes me go ahhhh, this is so beautiful and makes me yearn for love.
ocean
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thank you
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I also just popped in to check out your work, and loved this piece very much! So delicate and yet full of passion! Wonderfully written. Good luck in the contest!
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thank you
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Just popped in curious about your work and I am glad i did this piece is as delicate as a spider web and eloquent in its vocabulary enjoyed the read
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thanks so much... glad your curiosity got the best of you and i appreciate your comment.
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beautiful, esp the ending. best of luck witht the contest.
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thanks
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the silver lining and golden tomorrows. i love it. =D
you're my favorite
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