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Finish Line

Missing image

Laying on velvet sheets

Hot and eagerly ready

Soft legs are spread wide

For you to gas up on my delicacy

Then drive full throttle

On my slippery and wet road

Till you reach the finish line

To recieve your orgasmic trophy

Releasing it down the back of my throat

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The picture used with this write I do not claim as my own. Picture found on yahoo images.

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  • Swtpoetryman
    February 19, 2009

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    AS GOOD AS GOLD TO ME! YUMMY!

    Congrats on the Trophy MISS HOT CHOCKLAT! This was a sizzling piece that had my heart racing as I held my hose in my hand and pounded away like I was a fire engine speeding to a fire! Shit, I skeeted so fucking much that I could have put out a forest fire with all me creamy cum! YUM! YUM! Shall I lick it off of my fingers for you?
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.


  • Beret55 silver member
    January 6, 2009
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    Damn,, your sexy.. I love your mind..
    Another exciting write.. mmmmmmm

  • New-n-Improved
    December 15, 2008

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    This Deserves The Gold Trophy

    This is a great poem. The judges were good at using their poetic side to judge this one. This poem is just right for the gold trophy.
    Keep writing and I'll keep reading.


  • Gay-Militant
    December 11, 2008

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    its okay, but it was kind of disgusting sounding. i guess i understood what you were going for but i just fon't think its seductive. its too primal. too blunt. seduction, imo, is more subtle and gentle. but this isn't a bad write at all.


  • Unconscious-Energy
    December 11, 2008
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    Yummy Yummy, Absolute ecstacy fantastic and brilliant write well done...


  • Glasyalabolas
    December 8, 2008
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    I love the wording in this piece, full throttle, racing....excellent.

    Good write.


  • heavenskyy
    December 4, 2008
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    ooh lala


  • greeny
    December 4, 2008
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    hmmm. definitely hot.. i love it..

  • mz.butter
    December 3, 2008
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    you keep doing what you do best ,this is really a hot and steamy piece.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 3, 2008

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    all i can say is wow, seriously this is something good, like a heated touch on a cold night, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • sensualbutterfly
    December 3, 2008
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    Oh my my my! I love it! very seductive piece here! You go sis


  • theredcatjazzoflove
    December 3, 2008

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    you are so fucken nasty girl fall in love hell so i can read your heart but look who's talking right i love this you picking up a style with your writing to cool i like it this was hot


  • darell
    December 3, 2008

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    Explosive!

    Omg baby! you sure know how to
    keep Johnny at attention.lol
    This was so deliciously hot.
    I want some. Can I have some too?
    You go go gurl! Rock my world.


  • ratkos
    December 3, 2008

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    WOW Sinfully written but with expert ease.Naughtily penned Great write! Definitely evokes the senses!


  • Wandering Woodchuck gold member
    December 3, 2008
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    Erotic NASCAR poetry? Great job.

    Mike


  • KayJay
    December 3, 2008

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    You wicked, wicked lady... go straight to my room What a wonderfully "warm" tale (tail?) you've told... as only you can Bravo!
    Ken


  • penman gold member
    December 3, 2008
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    Excellent

    Whew, you sure made this sizzling. Oy what a great job. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Desire gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    Holy Moly~

    Oh My Word this is a Powerful piece and piece raised to the top
    Hot images to entice the Mind, Body also Soul
    to go
    Love thids!!
    Oy!! Smokin'
    Keep that quill dancing Beautiful~
    Thank You for sharing Your Heat and Voice~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Jeremy0826 gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    This is definitely HOT babe!
    I love this picture here.
    Good luck and keep them coming!




    Jeremy0826

  • mcfreeman
    December 3, 2008
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    You're in a no speeding zone

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