An angel stepped out of the dark
as soon as she did,I saw a lil spark
maybe it was the wind leaving its mark..
I made no remark,I made no remark
She said she was there to protect me
and so i believed her from what I could see
I expressed my only existing plea,
she set me free,she set me free.
She was standing there in elegant white
with her wings abundant in shining light
She looked so promising I couldn't shake my sight
Suddenly I saw the light,Suddenly I saw the light
An angel was she,precious and priceless
she was my guard,she was so selfless
she was the messenger of God,his princess
I cannot express ,I cannot express
She said she would return soon
with the rise of the silver moon,
with the eruption of a sand dune
to grant me a boon,to grant me a boon.
Author notes
credit to Michael Walker for inventing this new form of poetry 'Monotetra'
Watermelons !!!
Anagha-Nataraj
A contest entry
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BEAUTILFUL!!!!!
Oh to have an angel come and lift you up
How could anyone ever want for more than this beautiful sight and experience.
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thank u puppy dog !
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nice job and thank you for entering
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No trophies. Sorry.
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Wow very nice
I really this
good luck
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Nice flow and the unique set up, just like a song. Blessings.
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thank uu !!
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This is a lovely poem indeed I am glad that I did open this contest for pre writes thanks for your entry be well.
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i am so glad u liked it !
good luck judging
take care !
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Inspiring. Very very well done. Good use of repitition. Very touching indeed. Thank you for entering and best of luck.
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thank u dani!
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Great stuff!!!
Wonderful narrative with a great rhyme scheme & flow that enthralled throughout...
Keep up the good work & good luck in the contest...
Well done!!!
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thanku !!
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wonderfully writtn..repititions not overdone..gr8 work
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thank u soliloquist !
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Beautiful Poem ...
with lovely lyricall elements in the repetition. Message just divine.
Love
Myra
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thank u myrataal !
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really really like
the repetition was wonderful you are growing by leaps and bounds
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thanks draig !!!
im so glad u liked it ....
u know...ma mom said my rhymes and forms r getting too cliche...so idecided to stop for a while...like 2-3 days..so that my mind is not always with it...
and it worked...im happyy..coz u happy wid it
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muah!
*Heart*
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