I am a parent,
One who is torn
By the choices of what
Clothes should be worn.
I am a mother,
So often woken
To soothe and feed
With soft words spoken.
I am a teacher,
I take great pleasure
For each new discovery
Is always a treasure.
I am a provider,
I’ll always be able
to furnish a home
with food on the table.
I am a protector,
no matter how stern
Making sure my child
Takes the right turn.
I am a confidante,
I will forever assure
A reliable shoulder
When she’s insecure.
I am a child,
One very young.
I do have a daughter,
Our lives just begun.
Author notes
The message I am trying to send is that, though I am only a teenager, I am just as good of a parent as adults are. I have the same worries, the same goals, the same joys. Teenage moms are often thought of as being immature, irresponsible, and incapable of being a proper parent. I believe that that is not always true; and people should not judge what they don't understand. We can be just as capable, and I know my heart is just as big. I AM NOT SAYING IT'S ALWAYS LIKE THIS, AND I KNOW WHERE SOME PEOPLE ARE COMING FROM. Some teenagers just shouldn't have children. The reason I say you shouldn't judge, is because you don't know what happened to them, whether it was consensual or not. I would truly like to know what you think, and if there is anything you would add/change to this.
Simone Brooklyn.
Option: What makes me Happy and Serene.
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I absolutely love the message behind this. It's true that you can't generalise how an entire age group will behave when given the responsibilities of being a mother, because everyone acts differently. People forget that the 'majority' is still made up of individuals.
Brilliant message, wonderfully told. The rhyme's pretty faultless I think.
Thank you for entering, and good luck!
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This is a stunning write. I have seen teens who couldnt even take care of themselves have children, but I've also seen full grown, adult women who had children and could care less. I agree it doesnt matter what age..I think that having a child at a young age makes you grow up quick- you lose a lot of childhood, but you gain the dream of seeing, this beautiful child you brought into the world, and you grow you not care about what you missed out on and focus on your new found love.
beautiful write.
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A comment on your author notes: I was not a teen parent (I was 22) when I had my son...but some of the best mothers I know are or were teen parents. Age does not measure how much love is in your heart. Much respect from me, young mommy.
And let me add that this is one of the deepest and well written "mommy" poems that I have ever read.
Thank you so much for entering, sweetie.
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I am a child,
One very young.
I do have a daughter,
Our lives just begun.
really like this ending.
I agree with your a.n
Im not a mother, but if i had a child..i would be one hell of a mom, no matter what age.:]
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wow this is true Amazing write
Thank you for entering
Good luck -♥Amy♥
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Very touching, I write a little like that...
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congrats in muh contest!
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prettyful! great work you seem awesome!
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I am in awe by how mature this sounds. I would have thought you had years of experience. My mother had three children by the time she was 19. One might view this in a terrible way, but with her background and how she grew up its a wonder nothing worse happened. She is the strongest person I know, and I look up to her more than anyone else. I am a teenager and have had a few scares and I thought about what the options would be, I would be a mother like you, I hope. When its my turn. Children are the most precious thing in the world. I am happy your daughter has someone like you to look up to. May I ask how old she is?
Beautiful poem. I really did enjoy it. You are a strong person and do not let what anyone else says hurt you. I am proud of your decision. -
this is great!
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I don't think just because a teen have a child at a teenage age that they're irresponsible, however I do think that it's better of to not have kids at such a age and it is harder to take care of them because of trying to balance your life out. Like in my friend's situation, when she got pregnant she wanted to keep the baby but at the same time she didn't because of school and stuff and she wanted to be able to support her baby and have her as her own. I think that teens should play it safe if they're going to be sexually involved. They can be good parents but perhaps if it would have happened later on in life it may have been better. All in all, nice write, enjoyed it much and it is a good message your sending out.
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Great read. I really like the message your sending out. its so true.
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Amazing poem!
I know for sure that, the fact that your a teenager doesn't make you an irresponsible mother. I'm so happy that you have taken your responsibility with such maturity, when others (teens and adults) do not...
Motherhood amazes me. I look forward to be a mother, someday. I want to be a good mother. And a good mother is what you describe here.
God bless you, and your child.
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I am sure you will be a great mother when the time comes =] Thank you.
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Very GOOD!!!!
I liked it very much. Good structure and good flow. tHERE IS NOTHING TO CHANGE AND NOTHING BE BE ADDED. I am not a mother but i am a fathe and i am also young but we all are caplable of doing for us and for our kids...no matter how young or old we are but it is up to us to do it and grow up.....hope to hear feed back on 1 of my poems....have a good one
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Exactly. I'll comment one of yours in a minute, thank you =]
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Wouldn't change a thing!
I think you said it very well. Now you are stereotyping. While it is true that some teens with children should not even have a dog, some as yourself do fine. The difference is that at your age you are just not set up to provide for a child because you are a child yourself. Thank you for stepping up to the very big challenge. It sounds like you will make a fine mother and parent.
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i love your word choice, especially the contrasts in the first and last stanzas.
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this is awesome, bravo my friend I think this is excellent, and your daughter will thrive under this wonderfully stimulating upbringing. I too had a son very young, people looke down on me, said we'd never make it, he is 22 now an amazing young man sensetive and funny, my soul mate, being his mum is the most exciting journey of my life, and to all those who said he'd be a failure wrong again he has a masters degree and is now a teacher. So hold your head up, be proud of the job your doing, tell yuor baby shes as good as everyone else, and hug her from me
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some teens are immature, but others can do fine. I know a teenager who has two kids now. Personally, I am one that believes pregnancy should wait for marraige. I hate seeing kids getting themselves tangled up in parenthood, but some can do it, and some adults themselves are way too immature for one.
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loved it! personally though, the title "A Mother" sounds a little better for this write. but again, that is only my opinion
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oops, that was supposed to be *too, not do
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I do am a teenage mum.. well.. I was when my first was born, she's almost 4, and I've just turned 22, people always judged me when I first fell pregnant, and now they feel sheepish when they see that im doing a much better job as a parent than they once thought.
as for constructive criticism,... hm.... i feel this could be a bit longer, it just lacks the energy it needs to really shine thru with your words.
but other than that, its a fine poem
well done and definately keep writing
♥ Nov
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beautifull
this is beautifull, your words are so touching, i really felt them, you have discribed everything that a mother is and all that you are, its beautifull. well done, a beautifull poem to show your daughter in time to come x
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This is so touching! You summed up exactly what it takes to be a good mother.
You're right about the "age" not mattering as long as the heart is given with selfless love!
People shouldn't judge they should observe and wait...and than lend a hand if needed.
Enjoyed this much!
Rhyming well done and easy to read and understand! Good luck in the contest and with your daughter!*luck
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deep impact
ooh Loved this! Beautiful words! thanks for your entry.
Peace
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