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i started a poem that i am not sure i will ever finish



memories shouldn't sneak up on you

 

 

levees fail
to hold back the water

and let go the salted rush
 

 

 

the leaves fell off the trees in one windstorm

 

 

you screamed, i cried
we used each other,
and then you were gone

i went down on one knee
your father pulled me from the mud

i hated you for leaving me
to lay with her in the rain

it's the colors i remember most

blue canopy, gray sky
mahogany against astro turf
red clay on widow's black

still haunted
by the way your legs
stradled her twisted chrome
and studded seat
 

 

 

I got drunk one night and fucked one of them.  I don’t regret it

 

then it was two, then three and four...

i dosed myself with bad medicine

faceless men
in scuffed leathers,
blue-black hair

i needed the ride
 

 

 

my hands are freezing

 

i tuck them under crossed arms

hugging the stranger in the mirror
 

 

 

i haven't laughed like that in ages

 

i was rescued by a six foot two Cher-a-like
with boobs better than mine
and a voice deeper than charlton heston
booming an eleventh commandment

"nobody puts baby in a corner"
 

 

 

I learned it from the kettle

 

when the heat is on
and pressure builds

blow

then have a nice cup of tea

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 






 

Author notes

the title from each vignette came from a list of statements written by the group called "in the slush of a wrung washcloth" casually known as
the "slush girls".. each of us wrote a list of fifty, and we were allowed one pick from each list with which to create our individual pieces.

the slush girls: Cat, Grunts Girl, Tara Wilson, Zochit2me, Jersene, Suzanne Dia, Rowan, Nurse Chilly, Jantastic and myself

thanks ladies

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  • Cupcrazy
    February 1

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    This is a very well written piece, the voice has that in your face style that I adore, it is real and raw and totally unapologetic. I particularly enjoyed the ending of this one, the kettle and the "Blow" gave this just the right amount of imagery to let this one seep into the mind and remain there. Great work, hugs, Bunny

  • Fabulous story of heartache and resilience...and also the need for others to give us that boost we need out. I loved the style here, and the descriptions of the players involved. The story lives, and so does the lesson learned. Nicely executed.


  • sheltered
    December 6, 2008
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    naked...


  • just rob gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    If I met you in my scooter-tramp daze,

    I'm sorry...

    These are excellent. I read and re-read each, and all, as a group. Thanks for starting my reading day so very well.

    As for these Slush Girls, what a talented group! These include many who have, by example taught me soooo much. Y'all should publish an anthology; I'd buy two, one fer me& one fer th' ol' lady.


    • Luna Tique Fringe
      December 5, 2008
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      and i'm just as sorry to say that i doubt you would have remained faceless

      thanks..i'm glad you liked it

      these girls are among the best, i feel honored to be included.

      ...and that's not a half bad idea..thanks


  • tara wilson gold member
    December 3, 2008
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    did i mention i love this one? i do=)

    you rocked #13...


  • Jersene gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    I love how this unfolds...it's life in it's rawest of moments, and yet, at the end, there is a lightness...that cup of tea...that acceptance. I love this!


  • Cat gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    again...
    the resonance your voice is taking is deeper, more solid
    and more filled in
    the pieces are pieced together like a puzzle now..
    and each one fits snugly
    and perfectly...

    lovely lovely...

    m


  • PerVirtuous
    December 3, 2008

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    I love this. It is witty, sharp, and yet full of softness, too.

  • Suzanne Dia
    December 3, 2008

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    vignette 3 and 4 ... they go so well together, you know?

    We go for those 'rides' and vignette four is kind of the end result, or at least it has been for me.

    I really do love the story you told with this, it's so honest..



    long live & write the slush girls!


    • Luna Tique Fringe
      December 3, 2008
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      thanks suzi, you know mary's title on this is so true, i've written this poem over and over, in so many ways..probably always will..

      slushs girls rock


  • Cup-a-Joe
    December 3, 2008

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    I learned it from the kettle



    when the heat is on
    and pressure builds

    And you will write a killer poem.
    Joe

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