We only catch a glimpse.
A small sighting.
A flicker of belief.
Never knowing if it was the real thing.
A candle in the dark only provides so much light.
But a small movement reveals more.
But then it goes out.
A flicker that died from life.
A lighthouse reveals so much for just a second.
Leaving the ships in the dark.
But leaving hope that it will return.
A flicker that brings hope and spirit.
Author notes
The first stanza is about the bald eagle, because it's rare to see them in the wild. and if you do see them, you're not sure, because you can easily confuse it with another bird.
The second one, should be obvious, along with the third one. But how i went from eagle to candle to lighthouse was that you can get easily confused. Therefore you're in the dark. But the candle provides a little light, and light goes to lighthouse, and a lighthouse is not easily extinguished unlike a candle.
Also the pic reminded me of an Eagle
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Angel
Good job -
I don't like the full stop after every sentence, it makes it feel like a collection of statements rather than a joined together poem.
But a small movement reveals more.
But then it goes out. - don't like the repetition of "but"
Thanks for your entry. I looked at the picture again and I can definitely see why the picture reminded you of an eagle. In fact I'd love to see a poem about that, rather than "light", as you could take it in completely new uncliched directions. Maybe you could expand from your first stanza?
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