a debonair sly fox
bobbing joyfully along
an experienced sex master
singing love's sad song
Poor little me he cried
as my chicks all flee
treating them so very well
why did they all leave me?
screwing as if whores
to love not a one
he never did trust
as now he does shun
he wanted to love
but his heart was torn
never gave his ardor
regrets he was born
wicked and conniving
as he worms his way in
not a smooth fox
but a snake of dry skin
most see his shiny coat
but I see a reptile
for once he was smooth
as I blunderd a while
moody clouds rained down
for no reason at all
he slide in like a worm
to laugh at my fall
though cries wolf now
as if he's truly hurt
he is player of games
just changing his shirt
enough is enough
said the mouse to the fake
off with your head
I've had all I can take
though you are slick
and carry a big stick
I shall not be your prey
not then nor today
Author notes
Option A
A contest entry
- Turning The Tables by CharleeBoy.
700 points, ended December 18, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I really like it
It talks a lot about my past love affairs. but now I am very happy with what I have.
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I can see why you won gold here.The rhyming is perfect and the flow and rythem is perfect.I liked the whole theme of this poem.If only we could do that to those who hurt us and play us in real life!Anyways great job and I am glad that I got the chance to read this.
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Thank you for your kind comment.
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Love this, and yes he is a "snake"
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And I won the gold trophy tooo.
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I do believe there to be a sad message behind the slight humour of this piece. A very good write with great flow
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what a dar' poem you have here hearttangles must i share yet so dramatic luv it.
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Thank you, I do love drama at times. lol
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hahahaha, this was lovely. what a take on the prompt! This was 1st class table turning for sure. Wow, how long did it take you? After reading for few times, I got the jist of the fox, sex master & his games, etc. This was sooo cool, no longer are you the fool. A master he may think, but hes really a fink. lol.exposed his true colors. flowed smoothly. nice job.
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Thanks for reading and it was a quickie.
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well, I would personally stand up and clap if I could. You really blew me away with this. I do appreciate the effort and creative rhythm you put into this. If this did not take you long to write, then you do have a great talent. Once again, I apprecaite you entering this contest. The poem was great, all I can say. The lines that really hit what the contest is about are:
enough is enough
said the mouse to the snake
off with your head
I've had all I can take -
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Thanks CharleeBoy for the honor of the gold trophy. I am so enthralled and delighted.
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Thank You!!!
Thank you CharleeBoy,,,I can hear you clapping from here. I just now wrote this but the poem has been edging in my mind for quite some time. Thanks for the wonderful prompt to inspiring my muse to write.
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