Living hell.
Alone,
In a pitch black room.
Lying under covers.
Total silence.
Anger,
coursing through my heart.
Want for it to end.
Determination,
I'm supposed to start anew.
This is just a set back.
Holding the scissors,
tears glistening cheeks,
Whispering:
"Do it for him."
Author notes
Just my casual saturday night.
In a list
A contest entry
- Touched By Your Pain by i.s.i.s.
540 points, ended December 7, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow
Holding the scissors,
tears glistening cheeks,
Whispering:
"Do it for him."
--amazing job
i really like the flow of it
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Wow... Great stuff...
Kinda had a drama & tension about it that made for a compelling read... And that last line added a certain finality to it that allows the reader to release the breath they were holding...
Well done!!!
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Thank you so much. I am glad that you enjoyed it.
Dani.
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"tears glistening cheeks" amazingly written. I loved it xx
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wonderful. Just wonderful. I love this poem...theres not much more I can say. Its just too good...
wonderful
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Noo, dont do it!! for anyone!! I loved it, its so hard and raw. So blunt and so real. Makes me want to cry almost! LOVE IT!!!
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the dont do it for him part was imlying not to cut for him. but im glad that it touched you so.
Thanks for commenting.
Lots 'o love
Dani.
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Very powerful; such raw emotion and point-blank imagery. I am blown away.
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