Kiss me slowly for a start
Soothe and press your body against mine
Look at me, deep into my eyes
Cradle me, between my thighs
Rub my cheeks and make me weak
Make me moan with power
Tease me with your luscious tongue
As you lick, flicker, and tickle my clit
Make love to me, kiss me everywhere
Captivate me in this seductive sin
Hold me closely, whisper in my ear
Tell me baby, all the things I want to hear
-and you'll recieve cravings in return
Author notes
My 1st erotic poem ever. Tell me how I did. Also if you can think of a better name for it that would be nice. 
Option: 4) Enter a pre-written sensual/erotic poem.
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This is a very enticing write......excellent for a first try and the title fits well. Good luck and keep them coming.
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This poem is awesome. Down right one of the best ones I have ever heard. Good Job!
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A good start
Not bad for a first piece of erotica. I like the title, I think it's a bit captivating.
The poem could use a little... more.
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For your first erotic poem, I think you did a good job...very sensual and erotic. Keep penning, your doing great!
Thanks for your entry!
Annie
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its a very beautiful poem. makes me honry. i feel like touching myself. thank u bby
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I thought it was good. If I could change one thing it would be the last line, it didn't work for me. I noticed that one person mentioned substituting in the word "rose". I thought it would be more interesting, surprising and a bit humorous if it were "toes". The few times I've read this type of poetry, I thought it was totally over done. For a first try, this is better.
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Its pretty good for a first one, but the rhyming is a bit off. Some of the words you don't rhyme, others you do. It distracts me a little bit, but other than that, I like it.
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Oh yeah, this was very erotic for a first try!
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i need a cold shower after that
woooh.
very well written, although i feel you could expand on it a bit, i dont know how, nor do i have any suggestions right now, but i kinda expected this to scream out to me "FUCK ME" but thats just me,. otherwise.. great erotica 
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I might refer to it as sensual rather than erotic, it is better than erotic usually manages to be. A good substitute for clit is "rose" At least up here. A very good write. Peace
don't see anything wrong with the current title
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Yea I think so to and Thank You for the compliments.
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Mmmmmm very sexy write hun xx Am nursing a semi now lol xx Thank you for that xx good luck in contest xx
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You eather look very turned on in your picture or sleepy lolz Thanks For The Compliment By The Way
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As you lick, flicker, and tickle my clit
I think this line is a little blunt and that word was unexpected lol. I like this poem alot though. It's very sensual, but still has that sweet feeling to it. Great job for your first sexy poem. -
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Thanks I just had to put it because I couldn't think of a substitute and I figured it's my poem so I can do whatever I want with it.
I know I may sound slow but what does it mean when someone say you sound blunt? I hear it a lot and I have no idea what it means.
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"hold me closely, whisper in my ear
tell me baby, all the things i want to hear
and i'll fulfill all your tempted desires"
It is an interesting poem. I like it.
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