Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Razor blade

I cannot disguise
All the sadness inside of me
In my life of tragedy
Oh when can I be free?

I cannot deny
You made friends with my arm
You left the evil trails
Never ending scars of my depression.

Now I am sitting in my room
With you on my wrist
You are a never ending parasite
Go find another host
Go find another fool to roast
Cause you ate the last of me
I am finally being free.

What did you think

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • ley527
    December 6, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    its good, the only thing i would say is that that some of the lines rhyme and some dont. the inconsistency messes with the flow a bit, but other then that its good

  • SweetWondersGirl
    December 3, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    I can relate to this...this is well written!