I hate how they stated the time you finally left this Earth, so cold and careless.
I hate how I thought I'd never miss you, for now you're all alone.
I'll never again feel your warm embrace, smooth palms on the back of my shirt,
for your loving arms lay still in a box, six feet under ground.
I'd like to see that charming smile, and the sunshine
spread slowly in sequence across the age in your face,
and the white whiskers which used to grow there,
the ones that would scratch my cheeks when I gave you Sunday kisses.
I'd enjoy hearing your raspy voice speak histories, one more time,
like a retired college professor without the education,
in tones that amuse and amaze, you always inspired me.
Now I might listen, but I know it's too late for such things.
Is it too late to say I love you? For you once loved me too,
when you lived and brought out the wonder in me, the magic in the world.
I'd give anything for another chance, another life with your wisdom,
for I never said goodbye, but you're six feet under me and now, I miss you.
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L.A.J.C.
A contest entry
- Do you have emotions? by Forgotten Anomaly.
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Beautific...
Such an incredibly touching, tender tribute to this long goodbye to the one who has tragically left life but not your heart. Beautifully written, I love the picture you painted of this man who could smile with the slow spread of sunshine and talk of history despite not being an academic. This hit me with the impact of my memories of my beloved Grandpa, long story that I will be mercifully short about as this poetry is about your pain and not mine. Such a crushing statement, to give anything for another lifetime with your wisdom, but what better way of saying I love you to those that we have dearly loved and lost than being able to keep the warmth of their memory alive, I hope your heart is lighter in time, within the healing time it takes to learn to carry this cross. One of my many favourite songs is by Van Morrison, Have I Told You Lately That I Love You, there are many ways we may convey our love and you leave love and light with this write.
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A most poignant piece which could certainly touch a heart of granite. Wonderful descriptions of this person which make him come to life for the reader...most excellent!!
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"I hate how they stated the time you finally left this Earth, so cold and careless"
Wow, that's some opening!! The feeling when you are standing there mourning a loved one and the world just keeps on going. To others who do not have the emotional attachment, the time of passing is no more of a big deal than the time the phone rang, or the time when lunch starts, and yet to those in pain, it's the time the world changed, forever. Touching write.
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Thank you for taking the time to read it.
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Damn...
I remember a time like this.
I remember all those who hated me.
I remember one persistant soul who stayed at my side.
I remember how I intimidated all around by simply being around.
I remember talked of things beyond my years.
I remember caring so much, but only showing coldness.
I remember dying.
I remember one staying at my side that had before,
A persistant soul.
I remember all those who hated me...
Grieving as though I was family...
I remember so much...
So much that this brings back.
Well written.
Damn well done.
~Alpha
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wow i like this
it has alot of meaning
it shows alot
very nice
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