Once upon too many days
Lived a game I loved to play
I'd latch upon an honest heart
Only just to rip it apart.
"I really can't help it," I'd always say
After handing back each love I'd betrayed.
Time after time I ran from the truth
Lost in my nightmares, but then there was you.
I'd like to think it was all their fault
When my honesty suddenly screamed to a halt.
I'd like to think it was all I could do
To protect my feelings until then there was you
You helped me learn why it felt so wrong
That a whole hand of hearts didn't mean it was strong
That it was way past time to bid adieu
To my sick little game
Because then there was you
What a great feeling, not lashing out pain.
Just unshackle my cuffs and loosen the chains
To know its ok to love in return
And finally not fear that I will get burned
I can hand over my heart
At las true through and through
And all of this happened
On the day I met you.
A contest entry
- Wearing my ♥ on your sleeve by WithinYourEyes.
400 points, ended February 19, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - THE ULTIMATE LOVE STORY by bookworm987.
400 points, ended February 15, 46 entries
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Good job! I loved the rhyming scheme, and the repetition. Good luck and thanks for entering the contest!
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that was good but i don't seea any choruses or verses. it isn't a song. im going to dave to dq you but if you redo it you can enter again
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i really enjoyed this poem... it was interesting, and flowed very well... i really enjoy your writting
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The rhyme was good and the poem flowed very well. It held some deep emotions and some deep self questioning. I really enjoyed this piece though, it seems we have all had delt with the same issues once or twice.
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you kept the rhyme going great! Good Job
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i like the rhyme scheme but this poem seemed to lack a bit of originality, thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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Yet Again
wow i love it great job really good write truly amazing job it probably the best poem i have read all day wow man your good amazing job keep it up keep on going stay true stay sic peace out and heve a nice day -
Oh my! Your first stanza is brutally honest as it appears. LOL
"To know it[']s ok to love i[n] return" a typo or two there.
"H[a]nd over a heart, true through and through"
I like the lyrical tone and the rhythm. I do understand these notions and hope that the conform was good for you. Good Luck with this poem as a contest entry.
april nicole
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nice
very good rhyming scheme my friend, a catchy little
repetitive phrase..then there was you..kinda like a song..good work.
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This is a great poem you wrote filled with a bit of sadness. There is a few typo errors you may want to check. Very good poem. Best of luck in my contest!
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