It flauntered in without much delay
it was poised as if it were to stay
shadows coloring its impactful stance
such dark shadows impeding the 'dance'
Cornered like kettles of off colored corn
raised in imperfection's trap so unadorned
ruffled religiously reaching rapid rank
all to diffuse it before it demurely tanks.
Nothing enlightening in valley or hill
this is darkness in the raw, no appeal
but, what it lacks in density it regales
rushing like waves watering the vales.
Emoting thrills that rapture the scope
paying in dividends with rations of hope
out of the veneer of intensity's lure
darkness ranks highest when one endures.
Author notes
Dedicated to Willie Coleman, a friend
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A flowing, quirky poem that is fun to read! Takes the reader into wildly dark places.
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Woopsy... forgot the Chinese coolies!
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I like this abstract... flauntering! A good non-word to throw in an abstract! Sort of a cross between "sauntered" and "floundered". It sounds perfect for the rest of the line. A couple of my recent poems have had non-words as well. The title intrigues me... give a nickle to know where that came from! Anyway... we missed you this weekend... hope you're having a good weekend... hope it's a 3-dayer for you.
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Well, Jim, what happened was one day my pastor gave me an off the cuff assignment- He threw this Sinkonox word at me and challenged me to write something regarding it, and this is what I threw back into his court, I think he got something out of it, he seemed to like my effort, but I am not really satisfied, but since I write things so quickly and without thought, I end up with what I end up with, sometimes to my own chagrin hahaha but its all good, for right now, I have not a lot of thought to give to my poetry, seeing as I am in a somewhat battle of sorts, when all calms down I pledge to take poetry much more seriously and lay my lines down with perspective and true attention to detail, but for the interim right now its more of a 'fun' thing for me, sorry to admit it being so...its like a type of rlease if you will, so I don't come down too hard on myself, I just look forward to the day when I will really get a chance to take it to the next levels...which I hope will be soon.
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re: the battle of sorts...
Hmmmm. Wow. I hope everything's alright! Best wishes through your trials and tribs.
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All is well, Jim, its just that sometimes crunch time comes into play and one must do in a few days what they should have been doing all their lives hahaha for now there's a 'test' they would like to pass, so is life right now, I am on assignment to cover some ground, and in the activity of it all, the 'frenzy' if you will, some other things like 'poetry' will suffer, but after the 'squeeze' I can divert some of my attention back to my original loves...see? hahaha or I could just sum up by saying trials and tribs hahaha and keep it simple lots of love
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