Social meetings, patient wisdom.
Dining together, these shared like minds.
Compared trials and tribulations,
And accomplishments of a lifetime.
It's hardly blusterous nor fore boast,
To raise up a glass and make a toast,
Celebrating each in waining days,
honoring strolls down Memory Lane.
Mutual comparing of life's quest,
measuring who has done their best.
Phallic propensity of old Gents,
comparing daring in the past tense.
Their wisdom is gained and admired.
supping with their charms acquired.
Mastered their trade and made the grade.
These polished hosts,know the ropes.
A contest entry
- Old Man Photo Prompt by OldBear34.
1000 points, ended December 16, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Still good.
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Thank you Ann,I'd forgotten this one. It makes me remember my Dad and sitting silently with him on a Saturday at lunch with him and his peers a little.
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Very smooth approach to the prompt that gives
a realistic view and yet, tribute too. I can almost
hear them talking and reminescing with each other.
Blue
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I like your take on the picture prompt, and your author note makes it even more pertinent to the picture... sentimental and realistic.
It flows smoothly and the rythme is good.
I wish you best of luck in the contest
Dee
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Poetry does not flow, poetry has beat and evokes an emotion. All that is required. If I sound like a bunnying butt, I am approaching my birthday with Truth as my pledge and no sucking up. Without beat, it ain't poetry.
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No slam!
That was not a slam of your poetry, it was a statement of the maturation of style and depth. I loved your poetry then, but it is far and away newbyish compared to the depth i see now. Yah dig, woman compared to girl except in poetry. -
So nice to see these spurts of growth
From the almost childish poems of pets and horses to
the envisioning and translation into the emotion evoking poetess, I love. This is poetry.
Hugs to my Little Sis,
Ann
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Thank you Ann for helping me see,I needed to restructure the beat. I'm sorry you've viewed my past writings of loved companions in nature as soft poetry. I've a respect and love for them and always will have.I see less corruption of the soul in nature and animals than in humankind. However, I've written on several varied topics over the 4 years I've been writing on AP. And in varied forms of poetry,my lists are on my profile author's page. I do appreciate your advice on structuring. And the private IM's rather than on the piece too. After all,we never stop learning and I, like any other writer can always use advanced advice such as you've given.
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very nice poem. Flowed well and enjoyable to read. All the very best in the contest.
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WONDERFUL!!!!
This is a wonderful take on the pic!'s One could indeed learn so much from older gentlemen such as these two.
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Interesting Mix
Your mixing of rhymed and unrhymed stanzas is interesting in that it didn't impede your flow which was good. Nice story and sentiment in it as well.
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A few years back,me and my ex took his father,my father and an older family friend of both sides out to dinner. They all had known each other somewhat for a few of their final years with us. It was an interesting and very informative evening out to say the least. We and our own children respected them for many reasons. Surviving the depression with families and knowing what must be done and doing it too. All hard working blue collar types.We miss them now for the love and concern they had for us and the decency they showed their fellow man,woman and child.Rare these days! This image contest inspired memories of them for me.I thank you for commenting and hosting this.
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