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Here i lay so peacefully i look at the sky and see what it means to me.
I think its cool but then i think it crul just like a man on a stull lol
It rox to be an american it rox to be sobber it also rox to be a solder.
What did you think
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Very good, but watch the spelling. You have something good going here
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Very thought provoking I love the first line, I love to lay and look up at the clouds moving across the sky it brings such peace to me. Thanks for sharing hugs Theresa
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okay...
i hope you know how many spelling errors you made. that made it kinda hard to understand it. did you mean stull as in stool? or did you mean toll? and crul, should be cruel. if you knew they were mistakes, and you did it on purpose, or you just meant what you said and i don't know those words, please mail me. but it was SO G00D! and by the way, by solder, do you mean soldier? Y334RGh!
and blah blah blah, sincerely or not...
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Um, Interesting. You like HIM i see..? Um little mistakes.. Very odd...
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Its good but i'm not sure that i'm interpreting it propaly becuse of the spelling. Just for ease it would be good if you sorted that out. It has a good tone to it but using 'lol' sort of takes away from the proffresionalness but i do think it adds to the implied joy in the line.
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awesome poem,
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The first line is my favorite.
"here i lay so peacefully i look at the sky..."
I used to do that all the time. It reminds me of my childhood.
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