the twilight hue of a television
beckons Big Ben's eclipse,
while demons of the darkest hours
prepare to devour dreams.
recalcitrant and razor sharp,
obsidian teeth, bare nightly terrors-
gnawing their way through...
fiendishly feeding
upon remorse and regrets
to spit a weary weeping carcass
onto another morbid mantle
called morning.
Author notes
40-60 Words ~ Image Prompted ~ By: Ithica [51 Words]
A contest entry
- PIF Quickie: Picture Prompt: 30-60 words. by chilali.
550 points, ended December 14, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is not the way I want to wake up but poetically this is a gem of a dark poem
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What an excellent take on the prompt. I really appreciate your entry. I really enjoyed the read. Thank you and good luck
Much love
Ylova
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Excellent from the word go My you are a crooner of lovely poetry dear no doubt about that
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Vibrant, quick, brutal, you take no prisoners as you quickly sush with assonance and consonance those that might protest to quickly that you droped of the edge of sanity into the darkness of a night deprived of dreams. I feasted on all that shimmered and brewed admist your words before I took them to salt my dreams.
Love,
Tom B.
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The dark is palpitable here:
obsidian, morbid, fiend, carcass.
Each gives a vivid layer of hopelessness,
obscurity of the desolate. I like the tie-in
of time as it punctuates the concept that such
emptiness knows no constraints of day/night.
Blue
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Quay Lude Dudes and Dudettes
dream canvas and a guava proximity on the side. this slides like an eye opener fixed on the next unexpected image of visionary thrust.
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This one carries such dark pain. Pain that has driven itself into dreams turned nightmare.
Restless wrestling to insomnia. Nice to read your work again. ~Pamela
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Pamela A Lamppa
Yes, Sometimes it's a nightly bout... to wrestle the coma chameleon...
hehehe!!!
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