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Hello Miserable

"Hello Miserable" you said
despite the giant smile on my face
and I had been miserable without you
but like a bird to its nest
I return to you
and you comfort me and keep me safe

Like a mirror image of your former self
you havn't changed one bit
Making me giggle like a anime fan girl
and being disgusting in a way
that I can't help but smile at

the last smile you flashed at me
as you opened the door
tugged at my frayed heartstrings
for I knew I would probably
be saying goodbye for the last time

Author notes

unfineshed
an rubbish anyway

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  • MasterFoxFang
    March 29, 2009
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    Heartfelt

    great wite i love this keep at this sort of stuff not rubbush ok all your poems except for that last one i read and not rubbish ok i love this one nice work and ill read more keep on coming friend but again no more trashing this is a great piece i could sing some parts of this nice love it all no favorite part


  • Shades of Pale silver member
    January 11, 2009
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    amazing! great work muh sissy! great, no amazing no OUTSTANDING! whoa! great work!


  • ClosedEyes
    December 23, 2008
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    how can you call that rubbish?! its aaaaamazing. your so talented. how you do it i have absolutly no idea. i toootalyy agree with what everyone else has said. beautiful, and im not just talking about youu i mean the poem too
    Love you forever and always
    xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    December 12, 2008
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    not rubbish at all; you must finish this!! :-)


  • kitsmith
    December 11, 2008
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    not rubbish, friend. not at all.


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    December 4, 2008

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    ooh hollie this is beautifui, you have mega skillage and i lovers you, never doubt yourself.. you are beautiful,talented, amazing,smart, inteligent, brave, strong, and a true hero
    al;l my love
    kitty xxx


  • xbroken.angelx
    December 3, 2008
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    i'm totally in love with the first 7 lines.
    the rest seems a little shaky, but still good.


  • owlish
    December 2, 2008

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    Not rubbish at all! You keep getting better and better at writing... as usual, I'm being left behind by everyone in everything ( especially in maturity). The ending is bittersweet. NEVER DOUBT YOUR SKILLAGE! This is beautiful. Love ya!

    - Your AP Sister


    • glitterydoom
      December 3, 2008
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      dont be silly, your not getting left behind in writing, I still think your amazing, and much better than me! Don't you ever doubt your skillage Anyway I'm not mature and I'm older
      love ya too

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