I would set about the world with my paintbrush and palette,
painting over pain and suffering,
brushing strokes over poverty and starvation,
whitewashing senseless death and destruction,
creating a blank, white canvas for my great masterpiece.
When I paint the world
with my oils and pastels,
I want to trap time in its oases,
hold the stars in my hands, and
breathe in the essence of the mountains and joy alike.
I want to inhale phlogiston and love intertwined,
taste the heady mix of ecstasy and hope,
catch a drop of morning dew on the tip of my tongue.
I want to hear the carefree twitter of the migratory geese,
and listen to the whispered secrets of lovers in the summer breeze.
I would sit on the edge of forever watching the sun rise;
I would stand in outer space and gaze at it setting in mauve pinks.
If I were a master of the paintbrush,
I would get another viewpoint of this world we are in,
and I’d try my best, to paint our way out of it.
Starting from the very beginning,
before time started, and the stars haven’t died,
I would use shades of grey to dot in the outline,
then I’d add in you and me, slowly, carefully,
creating a picture of hope and love, just enough for this world we are in.
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POETRY PODCAST: My username's imnother, and name's Char. 
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Comments
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you are an artist!!
you are an artist.. you hold words worth a painting.
thanks for entering.. it's a beautiful entry.
i think your third stanza which is to be the middle stanza lil out of the subject.. i felt as a painter i would not prefer to taste the dew or hear but to draw... the vision will outcast all the other senses.
i would share a secret of mine.. i dont know how much of it is a secret hehe.. sometimes i find some of my poem are not according to my taste.. i dont delete them but i use them when i get stuck in fill in the blanks situation.. like when i write another poem take lines from those unwritten poems.. sometimes i remove some lines just to keep the flow symmetry. why i am saying this is i feel your third para is not really necessary..i think with out it the poem sounds more better. i am not saying its bad or wrong or not good it just not to before this write or may be it is( its upto you to decide)..
best of luck in the contest
abdulla -
yes.
parts seemed awkward, but I enjoyed this as a whole. however, Tegan said no to you, so she and I will discuss it and let you know when we come to a decision.
thanks for entering. -
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There are many lines in here that are quotable, but I feel like you spread yourself a little too thin with the listing. I think if you were to pick two or three of the things you wrote about in this piece and expanded on them, that this would be a decent write. But as it is now, I don't know... it seems off to me.
Please wait for the other judge to comment.
♣ Tegan -
I am so in love with your words,
this is my kind of poetry, full of hope
for better day to come. wanting to take
on the world and paint it with love.
if it was only that easy, but we can always
keep praying and hoping and dreaming.
you have penned a masterpiece with your
words, thanks for sharing this with me.
Joyce
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4.75 out of 5
5 senses - 4.5
Metaphors - 5
Feeling- 5
Unity-5
flow-4.25
average rating -4.75
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You had this entered in one of my contests last week, I believe.
This is a lovely idea, and your imagery is strong. Thank you for entering. -
Aloha...
I am pulling your entry from POY...rules clearly state that this can not be in any other contests at the same time it is in POY! Sorry...
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Hello, and welcome to the POY
I agree with Dogfish. This is a lovely sentiment, and very well-penned. I would like to point out, though, that the POs require that the background be plain-white, with black font. I hope, for your sake, that Bear doesn't pull this stunning entry for it; it would make me a very sad pineapple
Also, I notice that this is entered in a number of contests; I, personally, don't have a problem with that, but the Bear may find it disrespectful. I won't speak for him, but some judges don't appreciate when a poem is entered in a billion contests at once.
Good luck, and thanks for entering.
Laura
Remember: No editing once a judge has touched your work.
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Thanks though
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Beautiful sentiments!
I would pray that God thinks like you!
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This is beautiful. I love the ending and the imagery, tone, flow and emotions are all perfect. Very nice! Thank you for entering!
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Congrates On The Silver!!!
You have a gift that's within you, and I'm sure glad you share here sweet soul!
Keep on penning on, this is another wonderfully expressed piece from you! 
Peace, Timothy
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Dreams are what makes our world livable, add to them hope for our future and we have a positive thought to lead us onward. You are a poet and as a poet, you ARE already an artist. Keep painting the world with your beautiful words.
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Thank you!
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Poet
But you are an artist and a poet. Beautiful work here & thanks for reading my poem.
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This is very beautiful and imaginative,
and I love the imagery of painting the world all over again. You and I are both dreamers, and we share a dream of a world without "pain and suffering", without "senseless death and destruction."
I wish more people would realize it's not just a dream. It's a very real possibility if only enough people would believe in it.
Wonderful write.
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Thank you for your fine comment
I know what's the best quote to go here- "To the world, you might be one; but to one, you might be the world." We can probably start change from little, tiny steps !
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