Chewed tongue
resembles landfill
you call life,
nestled in mommy's
bosom as world spins
on bony finger,
waking only to
hide under pill bottle cap;
residue hides
in parched lips,
tasting shame as
pillow grows cold
as pharmacy counter,
waiting for monthly return
of government pill jockey-
Bloated horse
walks through
finish line,
fading into oblivion
as mommy wipes brow
for another day of
debilitation-
Author notes
This person pisses me off....a definate loser
A contest entry
- LOSER by JinSays.
552 points, ended December 12, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - should you be on my favorites? by Melissa Gayle.
600 points, ended February 3, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I would play with the lines a bit for a smoother reading -
but the imagery is very well done. Thanks for entering -
no kidding.
pisses me off too.
I know someone exactly like this.
Ended up involving a lawyer and a court date to get rid of him.
Man, where do these people comefrom?
Okay, I wish you the best with her.
I hope she wakes up and sees what she's doing.
Probably not though, eh?
Anyway,
I love your poem, and I see it a FRESH write
Thank you for that, and I hope you feel better too.
Love always,
Jin
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