Funny how things work out, you see
You’ve got a new woman, reminds you of me
She’s got the same build, same hair, so I’m told
I guess the big difference; she’s just not as old
You are compelled to tell me how she makes you feel
What you don’t realize is this can’t be real
She’s just a replacement, temporary at best
She’ll end up leaving, just like the rest
I’ve told you before, that change is essential
Without it, you’ll never reach your potential
For true love and happiness, like I have found
No one night stand, nor just a rebound
Unlike the ladies that fall prey to your smile
And wake up one morning, in deep denial
That they have been played; physically marred
Alone in the knowledge, they have been scarred
By a loser that couldn’t get over his pride
And take care of himself, from the inside!
In a list
A contest entry
- LOSER by JinSays.
552 points, ended December 12, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I happened to click on this once, and I read it, and I loved it.
You're my friend Sully's friend, huh?
From Godsmack? You wrote the acrostic for him for another contest of mine. . .I REMEMBER YOU.
I hope you're well.
I love this write. Does this person know you're using his picture in this write?
LOL
Damn girl, that's gutsy.
Right on, I love gutsy.
Welcome to the finalist list,
You friking rock
Jin
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Thanks for the vote of confidence about the piece being gutsy! LOL! Just so happens that the only person who knows about the poem is my other half, and he thinks it is funny as well! Little background would make you laugh even more, but I think I will leave it at this for now!
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Excellent
This is a good all round write and I even detected some humour in the words. Loved it
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