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Melting Into You

 

 

You're words are like medicine--

they heal me inside out.


Nobody ever held me the way you do,

so close and so gentle, I can feel your heart beat

& I hold no fear in falling.

The smell of your hair & aftershave

is just another beautiful reminder of why I love you

and how I miss you so much when you are away.

Nobody makes me smile when I cry like you.

When the world seems dark and empty, you do

whatever it is you make me fall deeper.

I can't help falling in love with you,

just like the a sheep can't help following a sheperd

& the moon in the sky serenades your splendor -

you light up my life whenever you're here,

when the time comes for you to leave my side

I stifle a million little tears.

But again, I'll hold you so very close,

telling you that you matter the most.

No comparison could ever trace yours...

... My love, it's you I live for.

Author notes

lol sorry can't write well haha...
but yeah, this is about stuey, he's such a sweetie.
loves and thanks for inviting me! x

Midnight-x-Rose

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  • lostsouls12
    March 9

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    this is amazing and beautiful. i def got lost inside each word as i floated back into memories of someone special i have. great write

  • This is a really emotional and great write. I really liked he flow and the rhythm. Well done and thank you for your entry. xo


  • Mekhala
    January 20

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    WOW! Great Job! Very well done! Thanks a huge huge deal for the entry! Good Luck!
    Regards,
    Mekhala


  • Swan song gold member
    December 31, 2008
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    A beautiful tribute of love for someone
    full of passion and heart felt thank you for sharing


  • Rheea gold member
    December 26, 2008

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    well girl it is your time for love !! Beautiful and love just shines through could you put him in a copy machine ? some women I know need a good man like this.


  • Good Mourning Moon
    December 26, 2008

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    this nearly made me cry because I lost someone like this dear to me. Hold them close, and give them tender space.... do not hesitate in your love.. if u feel they are afraid, do not be careless with your love/. so lovely!


  • Glasyalabolas
    December 8, 2008
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    Can I 'Told you so!' ?

    Can I? Huh? Huh? Can I? *nudge*

    lol

    Good write.


  • Dragonbabyx3
    December 7, 2008

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    This is beautifully written! such sweetness can't compare! My favorite lines (and perhaps the deepesest throughout the poem) are
    "just like the a sheep can't help following a sheperd

    & the moon in the sky serenades your splendor "

    They just amaze me. Beautiful write!


  • Himmel.Kinder
    December 5, 2008

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    Simply Blandiloquent. It captivates the reader with a myriad of emotions straight from the heart of a well equipped poet.


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    December 4, 2008

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    This is a beautiful poem
    A wonderful piece
    When we find that person that becomes the love of our lives, it's so incredible.


  • XIII Loves
    December 4, 2008
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    Dont put yourself down. This is really good and really sweet.


  • TwilightDazzles
    December 2, 2008

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    Aww no this is really sweet! You did a wonderful job writing for him. I hope you decide to show it to him

    "Nobody ever held me the way you do,

    so close and so gentle, I can feel your heart beat

    & I hold no fear in falling."

    I loved those lines, they made me smile! I feel the same about my bf! Thanks for taking the time to enter and best wishes


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 2, 2008

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    this is you not writing well, when i do it it sucks, when you do it it comes out good, not fair, not fair, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest, lol


  • broken-colours
    December 2, 2008

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    "I can't help falling in love with you,
    just like the a sheep can't help following a sheperd
    & the moon in the sky serenades your splendor -"

    This was very soft and precious, like you're afraid of holding it too close for fear of breaking it. I really enjoyed reading this.

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