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Shadows within Shadows

Come with me in the shadows, come
Way beyond the caravan way
Drum out the fear and hear the drum
Play minstrel play; play minstrel play

Burn the candles ‘n smell 'em burn
Daylight is gone, this is your day
Learn the music that shadows learn
Play minstrel play; play minstrel play

Romance in shadows sweet romance
Sway to music, let your heart sway
Dance with dancers, join in their dance
Play minstrel play; play minstrel play

Come with me in the shadows, come
Play minstrel play; play minstrel play

 

 

 

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  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    Yes I can see just why this was gold, how do you do that, combining two forms, this is wonderful hun. best to you and congratulations on your gold.


  • Alyzeh
    December 11, 2008

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    Wow. Another beautiful write. How do you do it, I wonder. Tell me your secret! Hehe. This is just amazing. Like all other writes I've read by you.

    Love and best wishes
    Alyzeh

  • Eusebius
    December 7, 2008

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    Great!!

    Oh, this is superb! It makes the reader soar on the wings of rocs! This is MOST excellent in every regard with such superb and twice potent lines! Brilliantly conceived and mastefully executed...


  • HopeForUnity
    December 6, 2008

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    another beautiful write.
    gratz' on the gold


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    Congratulations on the gold, a lovely lilting shadow sonnet that really was a pleasure to read.

    Love
    Sue

  • Just a poet gold member
    December 5, 2008
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    Mairi has nailed this. An incredibly simple piece is some ways the repeat line being a repeat just

    works

    The shadows work, a shadow sonnet for a shadow theme and I am certain a unique form. A shadow Kyrielle sonnet, well I never did!
    And it really works!!

    Thanks a lot

    JaP



  • artis
    December 5, 2008

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    Oh to have loved in that time when one could be a traveling minstrel, sharing songs and poetry around gypsy campfires,

    wooing some dark haired, fair lass, with words of wonder, sharing stone soup, and then dancing both vertically, and later horizontally, under God's canopy of stars. Lovely images here. I often feel I was born out of my time. ~~Artis


  • Swan song gold member
    December 5, 2008

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    I like this Romance in shadows sweet romance
    Sway to music, let your heart sway

    and I promise


  • Ellis gold member
    December 4, 2008
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    Got me dancing

    Tiki


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    This really works. It's intricate yet simple, and the line "Play minstrel play; play minstrel play" has the feeling of a refrain more than anything else.


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    I don't know what a shadow sonnet is, but the real thing must be but a reflection of it;s shadow in this case.

    Love the cadence here
    nicely done!


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    December 3, 2008

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    This must have been really hard to do!!! I love it and the metaphoric use in the name makes this mesmerizing!

    Have a lovely birthday today


    :Becks


  • Pure Thought silver member
    December 2, 2008
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    Just damn good!!!

    No need to elaborate.


  • Desire gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    Excellent!!

    Oh My You have so Inspired me to try this form
    Love the weaving of words also the message voiced
    Powerful as always Beautiful~

    Form Queen~ Woot!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes in the contest too
    with much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • Azgar
    December 2, 2008
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    0.0


  • HaleyMary
    December 2, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Amera and wonderful flow and imagery. I also liked the repeating line at the end of each stanza. It gave the poem a magical, romantic feeling. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • RedAquarius
    December 2, 2008

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    I felt like I was perhaps with a gypsy camp, lit only by bonfire and torchlight, smoke and music combined and made a heady experience!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    December 2, 2008

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    wonderfull done and the words kind of took over my mind for a sec there, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • melphleg gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    How do you make repeating words flow so well? Amazing. You've taken your already complicated form and made it more complicated, yet this reads as if it was done effortlessly.


  • Rovingone gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    Such beauty. You never run out of surprises. Sonnets are your most intriguing gift. I love the line Learn the music shadows learn. Such perfection.


  • EmeraldDreams
    December 2, 2008

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    This is amazing......
    What an incredible form!

    Now I know for sure that Bethany will be in the best hands to teach her!


  • StarEyes
    December 2, 2008

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    Sis, you never cease to amaze me with your writing... A shadow Kyrielle Sonnet... Only you, Queen of Form could do something this amazing! Fantastic!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    A shadow Kyrielle sonnet, that has to be a first!
    Just a poet will have difficulty finding something to beat it

    Great stuff


  • Swangrnv gold member
    December 2, 2008
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    wow..

    You pen some of the most enchanting songs lady!
    this one is no exception!


    • Amera gold member
      December 2, 2008
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      aww... thank you
      I think it's the only Shadow Kyrielle Sonnet that has ever been written.

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