Fireflies,
like fallen stars,
like bright memories,
illuminate the darkness.
The gentle touch of the
sun’s lips softly exhales
in the fading light,
a residue of warmth
that caresses me,
intimately.
A soothing breeze
ruffles the night air,
entwining the beauty
of the moment and
the emotions that ripple
within, and lift them
gossamer light,
into the darkening sky.
A twilight dance
of memories and moonlight.
Author notes
Option 2.
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: “Moonlight Fantasy” (Artist Unknown)
No line limit
A contest entry
- Semi Quickie contest by Reptile Lady by Reptile Lady.
700 points, ended December 3, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
Comments
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Soft and warm...great imagery...love fireflys in June, gentle breezes wish it wasn't winter...blessings.
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I love the picture and you have wrote about it in a wonderful way, i love how the fireflies light the sky like fallen stars, congratulations on your HM and keep up the writing, ~Amy
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Vivid and beautifully portrayed
Love the gentleness of words penned
Thank you for your entry and best wishes
Julie
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this is an absolutely beautiful poem that you've written. the imagery is vivid and wow very inspirational.. I really really love this.. excellent take on the prompt.
good luck
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Some beautiful imagery portrayed here, vivid and very inspiring
The third verse is especially superb! I'm not a fan of repeating words so close together, like in lines two and three, but the rest of the poem is really fantastic! An awesome read, good luck in the contest but you really shouldn't need it 
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You are too kind... Thank you for taking the time to read and comment
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Your welcome, it really is a beautiful piece
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aw wow a beautiful take onthe promt good luck inthe contestmaralisa
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Wonderful imagery, in this brilliant poem.
A joy to read.
Love the lines.."A twilight dance
of memories and moonlight"
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