Sucked in by one sultry look
they fell into her game
of trivia.
Her body was the pawn
and she played to perfection.
For now, she could melt
the most hardened hearts,
in her determination
to checkmate all comers.
She would consume
every fire,
capturing mesmerised knights
in her quest to be queen.
Playing too hard and fast,
she discovered too late,
ebony fits only
with unwrinkled ivory.
Author notes
Prompt - Supermassive black hole by muse
In a list
A contest entry
- supermassive black hole by JinSays.
629 points, ended December 8, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a good poem, ah chess, a game of thought, one wrong move and you are captured on the board of crazy black and white existence.
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Heck this is good. These are the games people play, I for one don't understand them but it's all in the chase I hear. Nicely written. Congratulations on another gold. You've been cleaning up while I've been gone I see
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"capturing mesmerised knights
in her quest to be queen" now that's a mouthful
very nice, congrats
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whoa.
You know, whoever you are, Im so glad you entered this contest.
I've been reading some good writes, but nothing to hit right between the eyes.
yeah, I know this person, oh so well.
I wish you the best in this contest.
love,
jin
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Wonderful
Very well done. So very creative. Best of luck in the contest
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This reminded me of a line in one of my fav songs by coldplay... "just a lonely puppet on a string, who would ever want to be king"
What an awesome write with a strong msg.
A poem like this would be perfect for my profile page.
Well done Gaylene
All the best to you in the contest
Ken
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beautifully penned , i love the words ebony and ivory..remember the song, i even have played a little chess ,, good luck again x
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Brilliantly worded and oh so true. You always write with such style and grace even on such a subject.
Best wishes in the contest
Love Margaret
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My how wonderfully creative and deep this is...you always step outside the box and create the best...this is excellent and well done...I agree with Bob it does apply to so many here and in this world...a pleasure as always...
best to you, my friend.
mystic
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Splendid
And my how it could apply to many here on AP. A kind of calling out to those, the players and seekers of their AP realm. You go gal. Always a pleasure.
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Checkmate, every move done like a master...
now just sit back and watch all the other players resign,, I think you won this one
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