A still heart, captured in shadows
bends as darkness beckons,
eyes echo emotions
fear drifts deep within
fate sealed in flames
that lick the soul,
blending across the void
dissolved to ashen grey.
Bony fingers reach up
as hope flickers
light still gracing
a silent spirit,
time bleeds together
liquidating immortality
held once again
within the hands of
fate.
Author notes
Option 1 - Light and dark angel
Nice pic 
A contest entry
- Semi Quickie contest by Reptile Lady by Reptile Lady.
700 points, ended December 3, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I can see who calls cos I'm nosy, so be nice and comment.
Comments
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Congrats on your gold, you have been a pleasure to read and i have bookmarked this because it is so full of raw emotion, you have penned this well my friend.
I wish you well
Anne.
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What a wondrous and splendid line is this:
Bony fingers reach up as hope flickers light still gracing
a silent spirit.. It makes no difference how we die, we still live on, with hope lighting the way.. This is such a beautiful piece!
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'light still gracing
a silent spirit'
Just some of the words and imagery
that stirred inside of me...
Brilliant!
Congrats on the Gold!
~Pastel
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The poem sinks its dark fangs ..
..deep within and amplifies hurt specially when one knows there is no cure from premature or unexpected death. Specially as one has to face his or her loved one die from an incurable disease.
I will always hate to write on such emotions.
Today I cannot even say Lol.
For I just learn someone lies ill facing death, someone you too know.
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Some one I know?
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Excellent
Such a powerful take on the image. So very well done. Congratulations on the gold.
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A wonderful poem
I love the flow, the feelings and the last stanza was brilliant
Thank you for your entry and good luck
Julie
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Awsome! Deep and powerful words of darkness...so very strong and inviting in free verse...truly beautiful...
best to you!
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Wonderful, you have created such a dark scene but with a flicker of hope.
Well Done.....Best wishes in the contest
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omg this is wonderful so... amazing so real sounding
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You've captured all that picture and then some!!! This is a beautiful take! I looked at the pic and got nothing, you got something fab!
More freeverse too
You're gonna become addicted like I did 
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To late I think I have, tried to rhyme this and not a chance
To think I loathed free verse..lol.
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you know this is something i mean that, you did a great job on this one, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Painted with a dark palette, you words bring the images to life with emotions and feelings... Well done and all the best.
Ken
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a brilliant take onthe promt your imagery is wonderful and your emotions vivid good luck inthe contestmaralisa
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