Raging terror burns tomorrow
Future poisoned by its arrow,
Young minds consumed by fire
Fake belief sown to hire,
Death a name for religion
Lives a life of delusion
Raging terror burns tomorrow
Future poisoned by its arrow.
Author notes
The Octelle is a poem consisting of 8 lines using personification and
symbolism in a telling manner. The syllable count for this verse is
8,8,7,7,7,7,8,8, and the rhyme scheme is aa/bb/cc/aa. The
first two lines and the last two lines are the same.
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Octelle - Prompt - Fire by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended December 27, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for your entry
This makes me think of religious fanatics. They think that by killing and being willing to die will secure them a place in Heaven.
Excellent job on the form. Well developed rhyme scheme and your syllable count was right on.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
well writ poetic form.
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Impressive. I like your rhymes and syllable count. The line, "Lives a life of delusion" doesn't go good with "death a name for religion." You should revise it.
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nice rhyme, is this with reference to Mumbai
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