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bow and fiddle crossed the sea



the tuckaseegee runs through  
slow and easy, as much a part
of my body as is the blood


celt and cherokee
were the seeds that grew
along the creeks, in coves, and on hills

back on your mountain,

i hear you in the gloaming, and 
the half-light of dawn
in the call of owl, rustle of deer

and if i stare enough into the smokey blue
i feel the bow vibrate the strings

and your roots take hold of me -
roots that feed me,

that someday, i will follow
deep into this ground

where the tuckaseegee runs through

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

my thanks to Just Mercedes for her help and advice.

inspired by:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LOIjd0fBPX0#

I recommend listening while reading

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  • just rob gold member
    December 9, 2008

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    Congrats

    on a well deserved award.
    The first time I read it, my mind played scenes from "Songcatcher"
    If you've not seen that movie, you must.
    Then I read it again with the suggested music.
    Such strong image; between the Irish pre-history,
    the scent of the blue-ridge mountains at dawn,
    the native american feel of the reverance for the river, a heady mix for me.
    I hear this piece crossing time and space with deep roots indeed.
    You really showed us how it's done.


    • Luna Tique Fringe
      December 9, 2008
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      thanks, Rob. i've seen the movie, it's one of the few that depicts mountain people in more than one dimension..and of course love the music. it was filmed in my area, as was cold mountain. The music of the prompt is so beautiful, very inspiring. thanks, again

  • Rowan gold member
    December 9, 2008
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    I loved this... so fitting. Thank you.

  • tara wilson gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    i love this, what a gorgeous poem....your poetry is so beautiful ... and what a creative title...

    =)



    • Luna Tique Fringe
      December 2, 2008
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      thanks, tara

      what about "someday i will follow them ?

      • tara wilson gold member
        December 2, 2008
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        oh ... i get how you mean to use the word twice here....duh...lol...it took a couple reads.. or it could be that Shelby's in bed now and i can actually concentrate...lol.

        =)

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