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My Mentality

Splitting pain within the brain
Reality sending me insane
Don't want to feel, just want to heal
Fantasy now forever conceal
Have some hope, pray to cope
Mentality now begins to slope
Didn't know the price, my sacrifice
Reality will have to suffice

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  • Moons Lunar Angel
    December 15, 2008
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    Nicely written...


  • Simone Brooklyn
    December 2, 2008

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    I love the way you set up this poem, the flow was almost perfect. The only thing that didn't quite fit with me was this line-

    "Fantasy now forever conceal"

    It doesn't seem like the word conceal really fits. Other than that, this poem was wonderful.


  • JesusFreak92
    December 2, 2008

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    i love the rhyming in this, and even though the words are pretty much simple, you still get the feeling across. just wanted to comment and say i know how you feel. or at least i have a pretty good idea about it.