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...Our Sing Sing...

 

 

 

 

You interrogated my Intellect, warped
Imagination with tail spin as warning.
Dislodged Dreams from throat
after knee slap arguement~

truce triumphed, slept in my bed
however I adored the attention.

Sweet nothings soured- balls thrown
at circus clown in Cover Girl glam
yet we retired as Bonnie and Clyde
behind bars built, our Sing Sing~

on swing we pushed, pulled, raked
each others nerves, negotiated
in back seat surrounded by windows
misted from moments both bared
ourselves beautiful.

I rode your hobby horse home,
hat on head backwards
with my panties planted from mouth
into your jeans cotton corral
nestled beside a breathtaking wad
of used gum.

We were doomed to fail by default
but bore marks from the I.V. drip
shared during Fidelity's euthanasia.

If Hate had a voice, it would be a
hermit and have jaws wired shut.
Matters of the Heart made no room
for false gods to twist our tongues
tightly stupid into pretzels~

hurtful rants rolled vintage years
back into delicate sockets.

Thoughts thrashed, became enemy
to our conscious state still we steered
Destiny as drivers
with Armageddon wrapped
like noose~

arm in arm.




 

Author notes

Username: Desire
This write inspired by the prompt~
Poem Prompt No.5 is:

“I never could tell
My hate from my hell
Like lovers embraced
Two souls long disgraced
With lust for nothing but destruction” –
taken from 'To The Open Arms Of Chaos'

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  • Andre ben-YEHU
    September 8

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    Wonderful...


    Fantastic word play --satirizing and jesting-- to revive facts of life... "...Our Sing Sing..." flashes out pictures of ontological, teleological and spiritual nature, while keep the readers in good humorous atmosphere.

    "...Our Sing Sing..." is a profound wit wise composition in poetic grand.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • Glasyalabolas
    December 23, 2008

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    Amazing. There are so many intricacies in this piece that it really requires re-reading and re-reading and each time, something different hits the reader.

    Congrats on Gold.

    Good write.


  • Mistressofthedark
    December 5, 2008
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    Speechless

    By the time I reached the end, my mouth was gaping open. This is FANTASTIC!


  • Beret55 silver member
    December 3, 2008

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    My vocabulary is such , i could never write such a poem. It is so far above me. Would that i had a talent like yours.


  • McRae by nature
    December 3, 2008

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    We were doomed to fail by default...

    I think this is such an amazing and original piece, It fit the prompt like a glove. The dialog was fantastic and gut wrenching at times, and your vocabulary along with the placement of your words increased the impact of your message. Bravo, hope you do well in the contest


    Carrie


  • HaleyMary
    December 2, 2008

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    Beautiful write and wonderful take on the prompt, Sis.
    I liked the first stanza the best, especially the parts about the intellect. It seemed metaphorical, like being confused in life. Everything you write just flows with talent, Sis. Amazing. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.

    Haley Mary


  • Swangrnv gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    astoundingly good..

    I can't believe how you continue to blow me away, piece after piece..yet blow me away you do!! good write my friend!


  • Glasyalabolas
    December 2, 2008
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    No problem. No.1 is taken, so I'll give you number 5.

    Poem Prompt No.5 is:

    “I never could tell
    My hate from my hell
    Like lovers embraced
    Two souls long disgraced
    With lust for nothing but destruction” – taken from 'To The Open Arms Of Chaos'

    Many thanks.

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