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Scab Diving

We all died several times,

having been thrown into scabs
and left rusting.

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  • Beauty Of Silence
    December 7, 2008

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    wow. thirteen powerful words. its really stunning and amazing how you could write such an impactful piece with such little words keep penning, this was brilliant


  • redbird
    December 1, 2008
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    i think it might sound better as


    "were thrown into scabs
    and left to rust."


  • Lady Michaella
    December 1, 2008
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    Excelent.
    This is strong, and lol, its 13 words. Dark and truthful write.
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