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xXx...Oblivious...xXx

Toxic taste,
Maddened miind,
Poisoned pastel treat,
Creates utter despair,
Insanity leaves silver embers,
Product of a tainted world,
Hatred...

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Contest-
Prompt-"I tasted the ambrosia of maddened impulse."
This is 20 words exactly...

I know certainly not my best, actually this is my worst...

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  • Xianaria gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    Congrats on the Silver ~

    You took this down a dark path, one I would not have expected ~ keep it up, as the unexpected will get you noticed.

    Tim


  • KayJay
    December 1, 2008

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    Darkness becomes you A wonderfully complex write. Congratulations on the shiny
    Ken


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    December 1, 2008

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    I love your verbosity This s excellent, and good luck!