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Taking over me


You opened my eyes to darkness,
Waiting to see what I would say,
But I was left speechless
                              Without hope…


Honesty is a must...

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    December 10, 2008
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    A very somber piece -

    I almost would have liked to see this piece without that final line.


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    December 1, 2008
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    good stuff here.

    Thanks


  • Panicked-Puppet-xXx
    December 1, 2008

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    Simply Outstanding...

    You did fantastic on this one, simply outstandidng, the first line is my absolute favorite. Great job and good luck...


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    This is pretty, and I love the paradox in the opening line. Well done, and good luck!

    Laura