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Words

When words' fail, music speaks
But now, let me bask in words' playgrounds:
in grammar's mechanical rhythms;
registers' freestyle swings;
or making curved turns' in adjectives' trampolines;
and dive into verbs' and nouns' sparkling waters
under a winter sun

as languages float in sunshine euphoria

because -
I can only beautify secretive silences and word warriors
until
my pen bleeds a wash of stories entitled "lack of inspiration."

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  • slavetothemusic
    December 16, 2008
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    This is a lovely ode to writing, glad to see your work reappearing.


  • DeepDarkDesire
    December 9, 2008

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    quotable piece

    I've never read anything with a structure like this before, nor have I read something so fierce for such a time. You romantisise the idea of writing so beautifully in these lines;
    or making curved turns' in adjectives' trampolines;
    and dive into verbs' and nouns' sparkling waters
    I had to read this aloud to appreciate the complete dilation of sensativity, truly your lexical choice is magnificant! Though I do feel it lacks something, perhaps further elaboration around this line;
    as languages float in sunshine euphoria