There are many reasons that I shouldn't be here right now
Yet here I stand anyhow
The ice froze and cracked and stung
Oh, what have i done?
Those eyes are ice, and they burn and sting
I'm sorry, but you don't hear it
I should be dead right now
That look, it burns, with both love and hate
So many things, that couldn't wait
Niether could you, thought
And here I am dead-man-walking
Hear these words, dead-man-talking
The cold fire in your eyes is painful
I blame me for that
'If looks could kill?'
Believe me they will
Your proof of this
Will you at least
Give me a goodbye kiss?
I should be dead
There was that much pain in your eyes
I told you, that what i said wasn't lies!
But it's okay for you to hate
I'd hate me too if I were you
This has to be death, but there's not light, nor gate
I never ment to harm you dear
You shake your head, not wanting to hear
I don't lie! I never had!
And yet you're so very mad
I'm sorry, I told you before
And now... at last... I am no more
If looks could kill
They would
And worst yet, they will
Author notes
If Looks could kill... this is written as I went... so sorry of there are grammer errors etc...
A contest entry
- I Want You to .:.Scare.:. Me!! by pathetique..
550 points, ended January 5, 31 entries
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First of all thank you so much for writing about Option One. I couldn't ask for a better approach to that particular prompt. You remind me alot of someone I used to know in this poem, myself, probably because I understand exactly what you mean throughout and the fact that I've written on that prompt before. This poem in some ways is very similar to mine, I reccomend you read it to see if you notice the similarities too. For a written-as-you-go sort of poem this is wonderfully crafted and the emotion in this was what struck me the most. I really enjoy your style of writing, it is looser and less defined than I am used to but a nice change.
"And here I am dead-man-walking
Hear these words, dead-man-talking
The cold fire in your eyes is painful
I blame me for that"
Pure genius in those lines. I read this and it just sent chills down my spine, in a way I don't yet know how to describe.
Thankyou very much for entering this into my contest!!
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