"This is the last song for tonight," the DJ announces,
"Ask that special someone, it's one of your last chances."
Mine is sitting right over there, against the wall,
as she waits for prince charming to arrive at the ball.
She's been waiting all night, and he hasn't arrived,
she's gone the whole time wondering if he survived.
They've gone through a lot together, some easy, some hard,
but he didn't make it here, so she's the one that gets scarred.
This is my chance to be the knight in shining armor,
but, unfortunately, to her, I am just a poor, lonely farmer.
No princess really cares about the peasants in their land,
we are just suppose to answer to their every demand.
But then something happens, that's never happened before,
the princess stands up, and walks across the dance floor;
she stops right in front of me and smiles sweetly,
my heart skips a beat and my breathing stops completely.
"May I have this dance?" she asks with her angelic voice,
"Yes you may," I reply, while my heart is in rejoice.
So the farmer and the princess, danced all night long,
while the prince watches them twirl around to his favorite song.
Author notes
Title: Can I have this dance? [[I know I changed it to "May" sorry about that, but I'm a grammar freak about those kinds of things...]] 
option 6 - love
Missa
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Comments
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aww this is so sweet. I wish my prince charming would have done this for me then maybe life would have changed. lol no regrets. Excellent work. I give this a 29 on the wow factor... I hope to see a non-rhyming poem from you in the next round. You've made the finalist list. Total points 91. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck toyou. kahy
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Thanks for entering. I liked it. Just not a winner.
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No, you may not.
Seriously though.... "prince charming" wasn't on my list, but it is now. Sigh. Sorry, but that's too fairy tale and less realistic for my tastes. Plus, the poem tells but there is no imagery or metaphor to support the story by SHOWING me what's happening. Thanks for entering, but it's not what I'm looking for at this time. -
I love happy endings, I think this princess should stop waiting for her prince and find a farmer to dance with, lol.
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This is such an amazing piece. I loved it all the way through. I've been there. Bravo!
♥ Kathraina
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this is lovely!
thanks for entering
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wow
i like the end bit and is a good ballad i thought it was brilliant i really like the idea of storyline its very intresting and sounds proffesional
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This is a very nicely written romantic poem/story. You wrote it very well. A princess and a farmer. Wow what a mix. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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I thought the fantasy style and feeling was very well portrayed. But I thought that your poetic tone wasn't strong enough - this read more like a story, with not very poetic lines, and it wouldn't have been too bad if the rhyming was stronger. I think you need to work on the overall technicality of this one. Thanks for the entry!
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good job !
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Very Sweet.
I was rooting for the poor farmer from the start. What a happy, fun poem. Where do you get your ideas? addyam
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thanks! and i got this idea from a contest. it was the title contest and i thought this looked fun. normally i look at all the title contests and write some of the titles down that stick out to me. then as i feel like writing i pull out me list and build off the title. or i will do the same thing but with a quote.
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I enjoyed this, the simple happy ending. It's nice to see the underdog win. Thank you for sharing and good luck... -
This was wonderful
Great poem
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This is very sweet and a joy to read!
You never know what may happen at a
party. Thanks a lot for entering this and
good luck to you in my contest!
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This was an incredibly sweet poem. I'd rather dance with that farmer than that prince any day.
This was really lovely. Excellently done. God Bless!
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THis is a great poem, kinda reminds me of myself waiting for that last dance wanting to be with the one you love. Thank you for sharing and good luck in my contest!
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I liked it. I had to reread a few parts when you switched point of views. Really cute and its nice to see the underdog win. Great write!!
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very sweet! i liked it a lot. good job.
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This is an awesome write and very creative. It had a really good flow through it and grabbed my attention which is sometimes hard to do. Very amazing and great talent shown here. .
Good luck with the contest!
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AMAZING!
Haha! it's a weird happily ever after. This is very creative and I like it a lot. this is very different from other stories or poem I have read so far. I really enjoyed this one. it keep my interest the whole time. not once I felt bored this is very unique. I love this so much :] it's very good and the form is great the flow is good and the rhyme is WOW! great! and well that's okay we are all freaks at something write ? but overall this was amazing and a very enjoy read thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
~Maria~
P.s. Many blessing and loves :] and even if you don't win you still have talented remember that always <3
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omg! thanks! i kinda wasn't sure about it at first.
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No problem I loved it *highfive* great job and good luck and see it turned out fine
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