Twisted mind wanting to rip them apart
what sweet smiles they hide behind
i know the deep knotted up truth
wrapped around the ugly and the excuses
look me in the eyes and tell me you truly care, BULL!
you are such a pathetic liar, my body feels so tightened and broken up
my hands shake not because I'm afraid...
but because the thoughts of what i can do to you flow through my head.
knowing i cant do what i want to do...
like creep into your mind and make you go insane
or...get inside your skin and make you afraid of yourself
Today i failed to do what i have always wanted to do,
but...you need to remember something,
There's always tomorrow....
I'm Patient.
Author notes
i must admit i really like this one that i wrote sometimes i get a little too proud of what i write
A contest entry
- I Want You to .:.Scare.:. Me!! by DecorusApparatus.
550 points, ended January 5, 31 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This poem made my skin crawl. You really hit me with a few of these lines and I think you have accomplised a remarkable feat by writing about anger. I believe that anger is one of the most difficult emotions to portray when writing and you managed to capture it perfectly in some lines. It made my grin with a certain glee and left enough to my imagination to really satisfy the deepest darkest cravings in my head.
"but...you need to remember something,
There's always tomorrow....
I'm Patient."
I really loved the whole poem but this was a fantastic way to finish. A very inspiring write.
Thankyou very much for entering this into my contest!
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hey
idk if i already replied to your comment, even though it was a long time ago, but i was looking through my comments, and i read this one again, so i wanted to thank you for the comment and how good you thought my poem was, i really wanted to describe that kind of anger im glad you liked it.(^_^)
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from the writer
sorry the one i did to was number 2. on your lists of options
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