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Lost

the twisted paths of my life
are far beyond reach,
and i'm smothered by the darkness,
as black as the blackest leech.

there's nothing but the pain,
a dull, aching throb
as my love and my life
the dark will cruelly rob.

 

why is it so dark?

there isn't a glimmer of light.

i cannot hear a sound and i'm blind-

-so much for being right.

 

living for me

is much to cruel.

i'm laying broken

in a scarlet pool.

 

i've lost all my love,

i've lost all my hope.

i'm alone in this world,

there's no way to cope.

 

i'm choking in my wrath,

i'm tangled in despair.

if my life turned back good,

i really wouldn't care.

 

the fog, the anger,

the pain...

i'm lost in nothingness,

and i'm turning insane.

 

if i don't find my way out

of this vast and endless maze,

I will turn to ashes and be burned

In a flaming, fiery blaze.

 

 

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  • Agrona
    August 27

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    (claps slowly and smiles)

    This was beautifully disturbed. I loved it. So sad and helpless and decidedly given up. Amazingly surrendered to the darkness. This is very well done.

    Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck to you,
    Your Czarina,
    ~Seraph


  • RazorBladesRomance
    June 3

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    So dark in a good way. I liky the lines- if my life turned back good,
    i really wouldn't care.- thats deep.


  • MoonlitRoses
    May 26

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    Amazing write, laced with dark vividness, and a little creepy, but in a poetic way, which is a wonderful thing to achieve.


  • BlankCanvas500
    May 25

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    WOW

    I really really like this poem its really dark and i just love it lol. i think that you have been really clever with your rhyme and honestly... keep writin stuff like this. ITS AWESOME!!!

  • abmsem
    May 4

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    This is dark in a really creepy way. It's really good, you have talent. Thank you for entering and good luck


  • raiining sunshine
    January 1
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    it really touched me and it did creep me out. in a good way

  • xxgimmiegreendayxx
    December 1, 2008
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    AMAZING

    wow this is soooo good i have had some tuff times to!


  • DecorusApparatus
    December 1, 2008

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    Wow. This poem had a really really strong impact on me. I've been in some pretty dark places in the past and this described alot of it. I think that darkness if familiar to many and this poem is a fantastic representation of what many people may be feeling. The rhythm and rhyme were well maintained throughout and entries tlike yours are going to make this a very hard competition to judge.

    living for me
    is much to cruel.
    i'm laying broken
    in a scarlet pool.

    This stanza is just what I love. It has a meaning of incredible depth but has a striking impact. Thankyou very much for entering my contest.

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