You make me feel
Normal, an average human
I can't be a part of that
If-- no, when-- we leave
To go back home
I'm not coming back
I won't stay with you
I won't stay in this town
I don't belong here
I don't belong with you
..but I love you
Author notes
Prompt: Title - Wanting to feel nothing but the breeze
A contest entry
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maybe we can feel that breeze together in some formal
destiny where things work out more as planned then being stuck in our own ruts that we could still be able to love that it would never be stolen from us -
After such conviction and resolve (I won't, I won't, I don't, I don't), the last line sounds a little weak and insignificant. What proof is there of love if you will never return, and you don't even think you should. Thanks for the food for thought.
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This was an odd way of saying you don't love a person enough to sacrafice your pride...But its not original so it will pass trough.
Best of luck
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