Ive never
made snowmen on the peak of a mountain
I've never
saddled a kangaroo
I've never
watched a snake charmer work his magic
I've never
looked upon the face of a murderer
i've never
stolen a thing
i've never
written a postcard to a dear friend
I've never
said anything rude to my grandfather
I've never
seen a purple butterfly
I've never
smoked anything
i've never
looked past these walls of mine
to see what i'm missing
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Hellp penandpaper,
I think your last two lines are very profound... a lot of people never look past what they can see from the spot they stand... where they are comfortable.. some of these things, I wouldn't suggest you do.. others I would.. like seeking out a purple butterfly or building a snowman at the peak of a mountain.
I think that the "I've never" is not needed past the first time you use it. Maybe even to break the poem up in the middle. Other than that, I would probably take the rest out.
Bravo Poet,
Criss
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