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Faction -haiku

A faction party bemused
glypt with barbed tastebuds-
Use caution when approaching

A contest entry

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  • Janice M Pickett
    December 22, 2008

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    Well done. There are so many ways to do these darn things. Every time I read an asian description, someone has come up with yet another sylible count or style. I guess that the way poetry progresses.


  • The Fun House silver member
    December 14, 2008

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    Isn't a haiku 5-7-5 not 7-5-7? Either way it is a cute piece and I do like it. It makes one ponder and that is a great thing


    • Mary O gold member
      December 20, 2008
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      Haiku can be either way. Happy you liked it.
      ~Mary O

  • loafy
    December 3, 2008

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    Very interesting write... I have to say, you have a big imagination. I'm not that fond of haikus, I don't get inspiration from them. They just sound dull to me, I don't know why. This haiku is one to ponder on. I'm impressed.

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